I sit in my chair frozen with fear
What if I lost all who I hold dear
I lost everything once and I had to start anew
If it happens again what will I do
Some how this all seems like a dream
My fears lie within they reign supreme
Alone and lost I have to find my way
A way to find piece a way for them to stay
We are close but yet miles apart
But they I hold deep in my heart
Thrown this way and that I know not where
I only know that I love them and that I care
I do not know what will happen,not where nor when
But I do know that I'll be there whenever I can
So my fears reign supreme for the ones that I hold dear
My pleas go out to them with one silent tear
Be strong and true to yourselves and each other
This loving thought is given to you by mother
A contest entry
- What Are You Feeling? by Simone Brooklyn.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your most personal & meaningful poem from ( 2008 ) by justgot2loveme.
1500 points, ended December 11, 2008, 52 entries
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Superb Plus +
'tis a very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
Nicely written and I must confess I have had this fewar as well. Beautifully done.
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Very enjoyable piece you have heree.
I love the flow and the wording is perfect.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Justgot2loveme
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AWSOME!!
I think it is a very emotional & beautiful. It's great. -
Beautiful
I honestly don't know what to say. I'm soo touched, it's such a great piece. I feel as if I can relate to most of it but some parts i'm to young to know. Purely beautiful!
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good
This had was a powerful and a powerful ending I love imagery and the story . poetic good emotion Transforms thinking mind.like your message. There were no errors. Or No typos. Nothing I Would change. I look forward to your next poem
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"We are close but yet miles apart
But they I hold deep in my heart."
I am not a mother myself but this describes how I feel sometimes about my own mother and my siblings. All you can do is "be there whenever I can." It sounds like you are a bit detached and I believe that's a good way to be.
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Some how this all seems like a dream
My fears lie within they reign supreme
I loved those lines. It is so true that when our worst fears step into reality life seems cery dreamlike and unreal
great write
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This is very beautiful...I'm touched.
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Lovely work.
Nice post.
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beautiful! wish i had a mother to wish me well and lift me up. i enjoyed every word of this.
i do wonder though, about this couplet:
I do not know what will happen,not where nor when
But I do know that I'll be there whenever I can
trying for the slant rhyme maybe? the entire poem is awesome and flowed like silk but that part made me stumble a bit.
and again awesome poem, i loved it and even had my girlfriend to come take a look...she says awwww lol.
much love and respect.
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