all I prayed for was a chance,
that one shot at significance
before my heart drowned
upon the alter of dismissal,
cast unwillingly to misery
feelings perish untimely,
and a soul is banished
because it loved,
if salvation has a face
it would be your reflection
greeting a new dawn
delivering redemption granted,
and though I seek,
there is no face before me,
chance seems submerged
in unanswered prayers.
Author notes
Trapped by manips-of-artist2
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 25 by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended November 18, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - desperatly depressing by frozenblackpetals.
550 points, ended February 4, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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if salvation has a face
it would be your reflection
greeting a new dawn
delivering redemption granted,
ah that is so kind of you to say, but my reflection is a little rippled with insanity right now and usually is every day anyway. a good poem
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Sanity is overrated anyway.
I feel ya!
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very powerful, full of layers and depth. awesome write, thank u so much for entering!!
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Aww... So sad yet so beautiful....
Wonderful flow throughout, compelling narrative & great emotional depth...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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I appreciate the kind comment, thank you so much.
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No probs, it was my pleasure...
T'was a beautiful piece...
And thank you also for your kind words...
Take care,
Fritz
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Wow~
Powerful piece You have penned Beautiful~
What words to tug hard at the Heartstrings
Eyes swell feeling the Voice spoken~
Magnificent take on the prompt~
Keep that quill dancing~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Unanswered prayers......
are just prayers not answered YET! You conveyed your emotion well in this one I felt your hurt. Great job on this one.
~Ron~
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Thank you for the read and comment, and yep..you are right..YET!
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So sorrowful, yet written so tenderly. Love that 4th stanza particularly!
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wow...great imagery I like your take on the prompt! good luck
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Thank you so much, that's very kind of you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Such a sad piece, wonderful take on the picture. Captured the emotions beautifully. Superbly penned, thanks for entering and good luck
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Words so profound as to draw the reader into this lonely world known so well by so many but spoken of so little......hats off to a work well penned.
Best to you in contest.
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Thanks Rick..I'm glad you enjoyed the read. Hope you're not working too hard.
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Now this is what I meant with my poem, outstanding hun, you left me with a sigh and a want for just a few more lines when this was over. Best to you in the contest
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That's sweet of you, thank you for the kind comment.
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Oh how sad. You have captured this picture beautifully and woven a story with wonderful imagery.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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Thank you sweetness..didn't mean to go so sad..but she does look forlorn huh? I appreciate your comment my friend.
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Perfect for the prompt. A really well-expressed, very sad piece. Wonderful!
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Thank you young man.. it's what came to mind when I saw the picture.
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Beautifully written, such sadness within her soul with no one ther to comfort her eyes. Best of luck to you
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You are so kind, thank you for reading and commenting..it is much appreciated.
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Any time, I look forward to reading more of your work
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Nice job. You do very well with this type of prompt. Thanks for sharing.
Mike
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Thank you Chucks..I love the picture prompts...they seem to wake my muse somewhat.
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