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Falling Out of Love

Odd that something that once seemed
so immediate, urgent, and compelling
could fade into a transient pang
when I pass you on the street.

Words spoken in the heat of the moment
lack power without constant reinforcement.
I find that words cannot take the place
of unspoken understanding
between two linked souls.

Desire is a fickle thing-
sometimes shallow as a puddle in the rain.
Because it turns out there's a fine line
between "I love you" and "Kiss my ass".

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prompt is "Falling out of love"
poem by breedluv
Amaranthine Lover

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  • Swan song gold member
    January 5
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    That final stanza was just dam Good!!!!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    usually I wouldn't go for this type of write, but something about the situation in the piece I can really personally relate to and I can sense the intensity between the "said two linked souls" awesome


  • Jesann gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    Wonderful write, very well expressed.
    Ha ha...love that last verse and especially that last line !!!!!
    Well done.


  • iamlost gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    I LOVE that last line, wonderful! Definitely a well done on this piece here, every stanza is amazing and true.
    Well penned,
    ~lost


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    I do think the last line justifies the entire poem...very well done on the 'greenie'

    Sue


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 16, 2008

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    I love the last lines...A thin line between I love you and Kiss my ass...enough said, poet...


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    This is simply wonderful. And true! I love the closing line..felt that a few times myself. Excellent write and best of luck.


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    biting my lip....oh hell......I can't help but laugh at the last line because it is so true, Russell. As for the rest of the poem - it is very wise. "Words spoken in the heat of the moment lack power without constant reinforcement." Again, there is so much truth to this. Now, I can't wait for you to write a poem titled, "Falling Back In." Good morning and I know you will impress the judge with this write.

    Love, Lane

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