hush:
let your daydreams whisper, for you
are a creature of the morn.
the blushing stillness of
babbled brooks and broken
leaves
part your lips
in wonder and in lust.
the sunlight cracks lies,
so
calm your beating heart
and feel
each trembling finger
of pure air
touch you...
he is your lover,
your imagination,
to lure you to
sleep.
~~~
Author notes
not one of my best?
A contest entry
- WRITE! by luna-midnight.
700 points, ended December 16, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
shine.
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hehe...wow...lovely =)
i really liked it.
thanks for entering and good luck -
this is really creativly beautiful, heart stopping almost, outstanding
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Thank you so much.
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Hmmm... Yes, I shall say it again... Hmmm.
Bon Jovi would be proud. Frankly I think he'd sell his hairstyle to homosexuals to get his hands on this type of penmanship.
I find this piece in order with contempary style of today... Your poetic voice is very powerful, and I love the imagery you create with it.
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Thank you.
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Wow. This is really awesome. I really like the calmness and the serenity to it. Though you do not see it as your best (I cannot dare to ask how one chooses which piece is there best...) It is a very good poem.
Wonderfully done, excellent word choice
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I haven't read any of your work, but if this isn't good, than I don't know what is.
I loved it, excellent imagery...so beautiful.
Thank you for entering and good luck to you in the contest.
Love, Alyzeh
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This is pretty good. I like the imagery given to the reader. Maybe more would be better, but it seems fine for a thought.
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maybe you dont think so but i think its very well written sis
well done
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Do not know how to take this.it seems as if it should say more.I feel that it is kind of lost in a moment or thought.Just my opinion but it sounds good as it is too.
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Thank you for your comment.
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