There is a new wind fiercely blowing
dispersing the shadows in my life,
coursing a pathway through resistance
cutting bonds of conflict like a knife.
Caught on its breath I rise up higher
cascading in waves of self reform,
ebbing and flowing in the current
exhaling the debris of each storm.
Dared to ride the winds of attainment
heeding their whispered words of gain,
dared my heart to be free and soaring
spanning the atmospheric plane.
Vision rides on waves of persistence
opens my mind to understanding,
shifting and swerving like a kite
propelling me to a safe landing.
Facing the wind its breath surrounds me
carries me, advances, and propels,
at last, I’ve felt the kiss of heaven
and wind chimes ring like striking bells
Author notes
Image credit: "Wind" by: *Stefano83
A contest entry
- Contest. by PerfectImperfection.
800 points, ended December 10, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautifully written
Love this:
Vision rides on waves of persistence
opens my mind to understanding,
shifting and swerving like a kite
propelling me to a safe landing.
Happy holidays,
Fayfreire
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A nice flow throughout here, the rhyme subtle yet effective. Hopeful and smooth. Thank you for your entry!
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Great stuff.
To be inspired to rise above one's problems is like a good wine for it allows others to forge some hope and try it out. Great message and loved it.
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mom, this is one of your best i mean really i like this poem here, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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What a beauty of a poem, just melts like butter unto our
hearts and souls.
Wish I would have wrote this......lovely, lovely, and
so very powerful!
wow....flawless is this poem!
way to write!
way to write!
way to write!
ears/Seattle
Thankyou for sharing it with us!
We all needed it today!
ears/Seattle
I too....feel these mighty winds of change...
and they scorch a little too!
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I Can Relate
Caught on its breath I rise up higher
cascading in waves of self reform,
ebbing and flowing in the current
exhaling the debris of each storm.
This was my favorite, just because you used the word "cascading" in spanish, "cascada" is a waterfall. I just went through a phase like this in in my life, where change was like a waterfall. I couldn't stop it, but just had to stand and let the water crash upon me, seeming to whip away the pass and bringing a brand new era in life.
Your poem was beautiful, and I can relate to it. Keep up the good work.
Best regards,
Holly
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well written
well written work,
i like:
"Caught on its breath I rise up higher
cascading in waves of self reform,
ebbing and flowing in the current
exhaling the debris of each storm."
it's really good,
best wishes,
Isabella
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wow .. can relate to this one.. Coz wind of conflicts are getting here..out of control situation at hand are here tooo. Lovely write.
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Good
I enjoyed your theme of change and reform; it seems to have found me at a time when I needed to read it. I was reeled in by and could relate to:
"There is a new wind fiercely blowing
dispersing {extra space here} the shadows in my life,
coursing a pathway through resistance"
I am an awful critic, but would constructively rephrasing "attain" and maybe the fourth stanza.
"Facing the wind its breath surrounds
carrying me, advancing, it propels,
at last I’ve felt a kiss from heaven
ringing out like striking bells"
Have a wonderful Sunday, it was good to read and healing.
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