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Haiku of birds

Autumn's dawn chorus
but thrush sings a requiem
the summer is dead.

Spring woodlands rebound
with birdsong
nomad troubadours.

 

a frosty morning

robin sings on washing line

frozen shrouds.

 

Blue jays bicker

amongst almond blossoms

hen pecked

 

Cockerel chases

cockerel

barn's wall of death.

 

 

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  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008
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    well done, you've reached round 2


  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008
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    An avian of wonder here, with almost an equal amount of the countryside. Nicely done.


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    These are really beautiful and of all that I have read today, these most seem to embody the feel of traditional Haiku.
    the first piece I like a lot, and further on the line frozen shrouds really made a strong impression on me.


  • poetryality silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    I love birds!

    I also love how you have teased the senses with this natural beauty! I can hear the "birdsongs". There is a beautiful woodland in my backyard, (City property) most mornings, I am pleasantly awakened by a pair of morning doves that seem to have been with us since we wed, me and hubby. I would swear they are the same two that were with us at our other house.

    Anyway… Your poem made me sigh and smile throughout. I wish you well in the challenge dear friend.



    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee





  • KayJay
    November 17, 2008
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    Impressive Very nicely done with all the beauty and brevity of Haiku...
    Ken


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    November 17, 2008

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    Wow! you will push all other contestants with this GIANT (not becos of its size, but strength of words) lol! this is so marvellous!

    Bravo! lovely, lovely!

    Love and light,
    lencio


  • Mary O gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    Such pleasantry in the read. All nicely done. Good luck you in the contest,
    ~Mary O


  • suseann
    November 16, 2008
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    Nature's own Haikuist writes weaving fine feathers into a continued story.Nicely done!


  • Tirrell
    November 16, 2008

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    Love the string of Haiku, very transendental. It leaves me thinking of walking down the trails, listening to the birdsong. Brilliant imagery!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    Lovely Lady Di.


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    SO LOVELY TO READ THIS MORNING!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I remember as a boy growing up early in the mornings I would get up and hurry outside just to hear the birds singing their morning songs.'s

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