as dark dots ripple
the clouds' orange fringes glisten
dawn greets new eiders
Author notes
There are places where your head, your heart and your soul mix and mingle with nature's bounty, an early winter daybreak is one of those santuaries that remain open to us.
A contest entry
- Haiku v Haiku by Titus.
2400 points, ended November 30, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Isn't bobbing and gliding a peaceful start to any day?
Comments
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well done, you've reached the second round
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An excellent feel for that copper colour do I feel, the numerous urges for you to have extended this work are imagined, lovely piece.
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At work just at closing-time a couple of weeks back ,we saw White Geese going into the sunset at work just at closing a couple of weeks back. Half a dozen of us stood fixed by the clamour of hundreds of "peach" geese flying to the river marshes for the night.
Your lovely poem has brought that back vividly to me!
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Paradise
Perfect description of a beautiful start to a day. If the eyes on landscape is as lovely as your description suggests you nust have a little piece of heaven. Really liked the haiku!
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It is
I will send in a message an example...
bj
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Glorious
You have shared a breath-taking scene as a gift to the reader. It is so well presented you have transported us to see its loveliness through your eyes. It is a wonderful haiku!
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Serenity
So finely crafted. Haiku becomes you. Not all are talented enough to excel in this genre. You have offered a beautiful vision that places your reader so close they can see each one of those eiders. This poem presents such a sense of serenity.
thank you, thank you,
Solitaire
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thumbs up
simplicity
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Lovely in form and imagery...love the comment explaining the "eiders". I would not have known either! Learn something new everyday I suppose!
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Lovely
A beautiful morning image to feed the soul. Thank you for your words and inspirational image. I feel as if I am seeing those brilliant colors right now. Surely the test of effective writing.
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What was the last word on this?Is it mispelled or a word that I do not know?Any ways I think the rest of this is great.Good luck in the contest.
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Eider
Eiders are a migratory sea duck that winter south of the Artic. They never go to land, the mate, feed and raise their young on the water, usually finding floating debris to build their nests. They feed off bi-valves such as mussles and clams. They are deep diving sea ducks that both swim very well and flight a fairly high rates of speed and usually no higher than 200 feet off of the water's surface.
Facinating little creatures! Thanks for asking.
bj
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