Carve me along the dotted lines,
Hollow me out, leave me more than empty.
Sinking within my stomach,
Tears more bitter than bile.
Aching limbs and sickening thoughts -
He knows.
It came to me, as if by dream.
A name not either of my own
A face full of shame
A body of lies laying clear, shown.
Instantly, an axe through my feet, up to the heart.
Cut off my fingers and keep your trophy,
You found the golden key
When you found out my name.
Oh God, I'm going to vomit.
Heaving chest, not your desire
But still you watch.
My unsuspecting eye knows more than you think.
What you know about me. What you think about me.
But not you, and God knows not me.
A year, for Christ's sake!
I took you cross country,
You took me cross the world
A world, of just yours and mine.
A world, now smashed, now ruined.
Promised I'd give up on it,
Pleaded to go back in time,
Prayed for my lies to be true...
But you're in charge of your own destiny,
And you're tormenting me with mine.
Author notes
It was an actual dream, and as some know, I've had many the dream come true in one form or another.
The golden key is the truth, my name is my identity, found only through the journey.
Other than that, I don't really know. He hurt me. He didn't break up with me or some sappy shit like that.
It's just whatever.
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very good
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Veryu good piece. You really made it feel emotional and real. Great job with the penning! An A+ job with word usage and everything. Keep up the great work! I will be looking forward to reading and commenting on more of your work soon. i hope that you can get the chance to COMMENT back on my work, seeing as how I am sure that you and I take the same amount of love and put it into each and every piece that we write! Thanks so much for the share and again, a brilliant write!
THANKS SO MUCH!
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sweety you ok ? this is a horrable dream and im sorry you went through it , but i think you wrote about it really well and hopefully that helped
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Chyeah I'm ok. I have messed up dreams but so far this one hasn't come true. Thank Christ! Thanks muchly for the lovely comment
Love love
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i think the feeling is very present but i think it should be concentrated into a smaller package i find that some works tend to become diluted the longer they are. keep the ink flowing
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I really like this write.
Nice words used together.
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Wow huns, have I mentioned lately that I love you. and this is a fantastic poem, did you know that in Wicca (at least the strand I believe in), most people don't give away their full craft name, because it would give away power of their soul, basically. interesting isnt it?
Loves you though, lots. foreve. and you have some freaky dreams girly.
XoXo Claire-Anne XoXo
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I believe you've mentioned that lol. And I didn't know that, but it's like that. I'd definitely lose some of my power if the whole "name" as found out.
And yes. I have freaky dreams, my drunk dreams are worst. This was a sober dream. Love you too, girly.
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