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In Solitude I Wait...(Abhanga)







Missing his tender touch
Under the bridge I wait
Twinkling stars hold my fate
O waves, get him!




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The abhanga is a Marathi form, Marathi being one of the major languages of India.

The form is : four lines, with syllable counts of 6, 6, 6, 4,
with lines 2 and 3 rhyming.

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  • The Phoenix Returns
    March 17
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    never heard of this form
    but very nicely penned
    and this is how i end
    this short comment!!



  • contess
    February 15
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    sweeeeeet

  • pvenugopal
    January 1

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    Beautiful poem. Reading it the third or the fourth time and soarig on its wings, the last line to me became "O, waves, bring her!"


  • Samplette gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    Hmm..."O waves, get him!" Can take that line a couple of waves. Nicely crafted abhanga, thanks for entering.
    Sam

  • michaeline
    November 16, 2008

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    simply stated but you speak volumes.Good luck in the contest.Glad that I got the chance to read this.

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