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Digression

I'm shiny like varnish
I can't stand the site
Just afraid I might harness
What my thoughts are about

My skin bruises well
How they got there
I'm not going to tell
Shh, I did it myself

The yellows look precious with
The pale, pinkish white
I needed that myth
Tell me everything's alright

TELL ME TELL ME there's no fence
To cross over the bees
That I can see sense
When your words are just ends

Help me. Don't just send for a box
To put myself in, ship myself off
Don't just wrap me up with magic locks
I'm you lover, I'm a daughter 

Watch me now. I can't let them win
I can see now that it will not end
His touches want lust but that sin
I'm crazy, a lunatic, a looker for spins

I love you, my words are just dust
He vacuums them up, kisses my eyes shut
Speaks to me softly, he thinks that he must
He thinks I don't need a lover's touch

Its always the same, I'm never sane
It starts out with tears
It begins with the rain
My throat closes up and I can't feel the same

The last time he touched me
I could see his palms
He had wanted to marry
But his words are just dust, like me

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I know it's a little long, but hopefully worth the read

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  • AutumnsFlame
    January 20

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    This isn't that long, don't worry! Actually, I found this enjoyable. I especially liked this part:

    "I love you, my words are just dust
    He vacuums them up, kisses my eyes shut
    Speaks to me softly, he thinks that he must
    He thinks I don't need a lover's touch"

    Those were some beautiful lines, though your rhyme could use some work. I suggest you try freeverse. You might be able to come up with some good images and the whole rhyme/meter thing won't be an issue. Thank you for entering my contest.