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my perfect drug

hands skimming down my sin
lips intertwined
his hardness
how my body quivers

light slides down his chest

exudes
hands ever-kissing my skin
letting him
in

how i fall to his ever beauty
his passion
and yet i still want more of him

my perfect drug

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-hystaria
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  • kitty23
    December 16, 2008

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    Very simple and short
    I love it
    thank you for entering
    good luck
    Keep up the great work
    Kitty23

  • sauceygal
    December 14, 2008
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    errrrrrrr

    das odd


  • im dead - go away
    December 10, 2008

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    I liked this a lot. Very simple, but it brings the feeling of the embrace through. You actually gave me a slight grin, so good job on that.


  • ForeverLastingComa
    December 4, 2008

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    Very nice! I had these pictures in my head while reading this. I do think it could have been longer though, it's so good I just wanted it to continue. Great write though, my favorite lines were,

    "hands skimming down my sin
    lips intertwined
    his hardness
    how my body quivers "

    Thank You For Entering and Good Luck


  • phenotype
    December 2, 2008
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    lovely

    no drug can ever beat the effects of the climaxing passion two individuals can intertwine in


  • annesall235
    December 1, 2008

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    The thing that makes this write jump out at me is that it is true passion, you dont waste words when nothing else need be said, great job


  • exithere
    November 19, 2008
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    i like it
    simple to the point
    i like it alot
    thnx for entering
    good luck in contes


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 18, 2008

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    that is a drug that i think a lot of people can get behind, or in front of, or on top, etc, keep it flowing


  • the ripple
    November 16, 2008
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    Sounds like you're already addicted, lol. Good write and I like this poems simplicity.

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