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One Without the Other

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If there's no right,

   what is a wrong.

If there's no music,

   can there be a song.

 

If there is no deceit,

   can we trust.

Is there a dawn,

   without a dusk.

 

What is pain,

   if there’s no tear,

Are we brave,

   if we have no fear.

 

What is paper,

   without a pen.

Can there be a now,

   if there was no then.

 

Without the early mist,

   what is the morning dew.

And what am I,

   without loving you.

 

 

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  • penman gold member
    January 18, 2009
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and well done. Thank you for sharing.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    Echoing it back to you, I understand!

    Sister dear, I understand your heartbeat and all you share in such lovely rhyme and flow...We can't have one without the other...and that is how you feel. So beautifully penned....and I echo your sentiments..Someone is missed very much!

  • angel20girl
    November 16, 2008
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    This poem is so true. Thanks for the words

    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      angel20girl

      thanks for the generous and kind words. Glad you enjoyed.

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    TEARS FLOWING

    there is no wrong without a right,

    no there is no song without music

    there is no dusk without a dawn

    you can not be brave

    if you have never known fear

    there is no rhyme are reason

    without the ones we love...

     

    I feel each words and hold them close, for i to have seen that sadden sunset...we will walk together dear Little Wind and time and love will heal all wounds

     


    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      TwilightPanther

      Thanks dear sister for your kind words. I am glad it touched your heart and yes we will all be together again and walk the sunsets together.


  • Umi Juvariel
    November 16, 2008

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    I like this poem, minus the many missing question marks. It was simple, elegant and beautiful. I loved the font, and the layout, as well as the picture used. Your lines were captivating, and kept smiling the whole way through. I love this piece.

    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      Umi Juvariel

      Thanks for the wonderful and kind wrds. I am glad you enjoyed it.


  • arafura
    November 16, 2008
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    I feel the pain and loss you feel my friend. Try and remember the good things.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    Mom

    As far as poetry form and rhyme go this is well done. As a writer we always try to spark feeling in our readers through our words, as emotional as some can be, I feel that you have done that. Because as I read this I could feel your pain, not just in the last line BUT in all the lines and in EVERY word.
    I know that you miss him and I hope you know that I am always here for you.

    I love you Mom

    your son
    ~Patrick~


    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      Ktulu Blackwolfe

      Hi there my sweet one, so glad to see you still stop by and your old Mom's blabberings. I know you being as close to me as you are can understand me well. And I know you will be there as always when I need you. Love you very much my dear son.

  • michaeline
    November 16, 2008

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    I love this!Your feelings show all through this.So beatutifully penned.I love the ending of this piece.The deep thought on this that you havewritten gives one reason to stop and think.Great job.I think that the title that you chose was a good one and the last line was my favorite.I do not think that I would revise anything here I think that it is perfect just as it is written.


    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      michaeline

      Thanks for your very kind words. I am pleased it touched you in some way. thanks again.


  • georgie
    November 16, 2008

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    oh this is so beautiful... its exactly how i feel about my husband... the times he has been in jail have been the worst of my life. beautfifully penned,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 16, 2008
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      georgie

      Thanks so much. This is how I feel about my Hetane who was reported killed the day after he left for duty. He has been gone 10 months.


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    November 15, 2008

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    OMFG. that is an amazing poem ^^ i love it, it is by far one of my faborites that i have read on here ^^

    • freespirit51 gold member
      November 15, 2008
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      XxYoru-OkamixX

      Thanks so much for your very generous words. I am so glad you enjoyed it.

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