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Rag Doll

My body is wanted for so many things
The guys that I know think I'm a fucking machine
My corpse is the prize, my mind is worthless
Maybe I should just fade away on purpose.
At the end of the day I'm just a piece of meat
I've been preyed upon and I've been beat
All I ever wanted was to be loved
but deep down inside I know that no one gives a fuck.

written by Haley Bennett
November 3rd, 2008

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Please let me know what you think. I am an avid writer and I write when I'm really distressed or when something has really impacted me so all of my poems are extremely emotional and kinda intense.

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  • twelveandahalf
    November 20, 2008

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    I know this feeling all too well. Well written and moving, this is a gorgeous piece. I hope you can soon realize that you deserve respect and love.


  • SeptemberFaith
    November 17, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Hello Haley,

    I see that you have written with a lot of raw emotions. Your body is a temple and should be treated like one. Anyone who does not respect your body and the choices you make with it, do not need to be in your life.

    I am sad that you have had to go through this.. its a tale that a lot of other women share a common thread with you. At some point, you have to decide to fight or to give in.. I hope you'll choose to fight.

    I hope that you will heal from the pain that seeps out of these words.

    Criss
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  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    November 17, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Hello, havoc.haley

    This is an amazing write, though I'm devastated that there is an element of personal experience to it. You are a bright, beautiful young lady, with tons of gifts to bring to the table, and it saddens me to know that you've been so mistreated at such a young age.

    I often tell poets that a well-placed f-bomb can make or break a piece of writing, and yours definitely did the former. Not one of your profanities seemed harsh or out-of-place; rather, they added to the raw emotion in your poem.

    You will find that writing is a wonderful release for all of that pent-up anger and sadness, and I hope that this offers you some sort of closure. If you ever need anything, whether it be editing-help or just someone to talk to, please let me know

    Write on!

    Laura
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