Take me away,
wind.
Show me where I need be.
-Where am I welcome?
-Where do I belong?
Wind,
take me away.
Show me spectacular land,
where doves language
I naturally comprehend.
Show me a place
where life is in bloom -
Where I too can flourish
unbridled.
Take me wind,
away -
From this chaotic world,
where individualism is not of matter...
Author notes
Will be editing this - just a draft 
A contest entry
- Contest. by PerfectImperfection.
800 points, ended December 10, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive Criticism Welcome - Be Honest - Thanks :)
Comments
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As a draft - still quite a poignant piece of thought - and hope for what could someday be. To be set free... Thank you for your entry!
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Excellent draft here dear Amber....Just feels great reading this...you have captured so well and clearly here!
All the best with the editing!
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VERY good. falls along the same lines as my newest poem, Revolutionize, although mine is a bit more harsh I'd say. Nice write here.
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