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a death in a newly-flooded area

i began to emerge upon the shore
with hair draped from my forearms
and every time i blinked
a dove plopped into the water
only inches behind me,
the tide brought them gently
into the caverns of my back.
is there some reincarnate
form of bloodless sustenance
or do the holy simply
kneel and drown?
or: why open my mouth when
i can hold my breath
forever?


Author notes

inspired by clint mansell's "the last man" from the fountain
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bBWliffMAYI

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  • Heroesrox
    April 8

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    Wow. This really made me think and for that, it deserved the gold that it landed you! Awesome job here. Love yur words. Thanks for the share.


  • Sprite silver member
    March 11

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    VERY interesting read. I see why you were given the gold, though I am not a fan of all lower case letters. I cannot say that I understand this poem completely, but it doesn't matter as long as it made me think! ~ Joyce


  • sleep artist
    January 3

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    well! something serious here, the kind of poem which one can read perpetually (had anyone the heart for eternal reading), which does not get old, for i have read it a couple of times and it seems that each time some new verse is jumping at me with the fervor of poetry..
    particularly, as others have noted, the last five lines were sublime


  • aanika
    January 1

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    why open my mouth when
    i can hold my breath
    forever?


    this is
    brilliance
    at its best.

    you are so talented it blows my mind.


  • brandy.
    December 23, 2008
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    or: why open my mouth when
    i can hold my breath
    forever?



    just wow


  • nancy drew
    December 18, 2008
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    awesomeage.


  • outofsadness
    December 3, 2008
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    beautiful...(in an i'm-really-excited-but-an-exclamation-wouldn't-quite-fit sort of way)


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 18, 2008
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    The person below is correct,
    you should listen to her


  • mask-malfunction
    November 16, 2008
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    "do the holy simply
    kneel and drown?"

    fuck, this is good.


  • geometry
    November 16, 2008

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    GOOOOOOOOOOD
    GOOOOOOOOOOOD
    my phone's been fucking up recently, or yours has? every time i try to call you it rings once and stops
    so call me


  • Cassandra Gemini
    November 15, 2008
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    profound and haunting. well done.

    my favorite part: .... the whole thing.

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