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Lighthouse Vagabond

Circling Lights Swing Like Cylinders
Forth Oblivious Ocean
Far Far Below Cliffs Of Loneliness
Beyond Vastness Of Aquamarine Tides

She Ponders In Her Nightdress
The North Wind, engulfing
With Wings Of Hope
Will His Return Come To Pass?

A Lighthouse Vagabond,
Prayers For His Millions "I Love You's"
Those All Or Nothing Days...
They Were Married Beneath
This Titan Of The Sea.

Her lighthouse, The Living Memory
And The Countless Sunsets
Reminding Of His Caressing Arms
As She Drifts To Slumber...
On The Floors Of This Searching Savior.

Author notes

Written For A Contest. About a lonely vagabond who lives at her lighthouse awaiting for the return of her husband from the sea.

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  • Yorkshire Rose
    November 25, 2008
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    Beatifully done, as if the poem was made for the picture


  • Ryno
    November 25, 2008

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    I don't get all the capitilization. I don't understand why it is there and it confuses me when I first start to read.

    Also, I felt like you relied too much on descriptive words for your imagery, but it was still there and I saw some images being created.

    I loved the emotion, it was very strong and I could really feel that raw pang of loneliness. Well done.

    Thank-you for the entry.

  • Eusebius
    November 17, 2008

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    Most lovely and very poignant piece of verse here. Nicely understated which increases it potency... loved it... bravo...


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is wonderful, your images sweep the reader into a real message behind the prettiness. I was only a little distracted with all the capitalization. Best to you in the contest