two separate and completely unique planes of existence
wavered between would and wise
as the indifferent ones listened
their potty trained in naughtiness
was not enough to grasp foul meaning
of mid-morning was
A contest entry
- imagery; lighthouse. by Ryno.
400 points, ended November 25, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This one really makes me think.... In fact I am still thinking, actually. Very... Interesting word choice.
That is all I'm going to say
hehe
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This is interesting.
My favourite thing about it I think would have to be what it captured. It is almost like time slowed down for the piece and depicted these feelings/situation right before or as it was happening.
I also like the abstract images and ideas that came off of them.
Indeed, a unique take on the prompt, but I think I liked this one, very cool.
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I think we all waver between two diferent planes of existance! A real thinker here hun
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though it may seem inappropriate to some this busted a tickled giggle as i tripped folly down the last three lines...hope that makes a little sense... you make me feel like i'm gettin away with bein a smartass...love love it...i'll try to leave a more whacked out comment on my next installment of you
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'separate'
Do you know how many people spell this damn word wrong? (You didn't)
'seperate' 'serperate' 'serparate'
Like seriously...I have seen teachers spell it wrong, ADVERTISING COMPANIES spell it wrong (completely unacceptable, what kind of PR is that?!!!)
But yeah.
That alone gets clappies,
but I also liked it.
"their" Did you mean "they are", as in 'they're'?
"potty-trained in naughtiness"
LMFAO
Jessica
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i did mean their but thank you for noticing
and your comment
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You sound formal.
LMAO.
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