one day when I was walking allong
I began to whistle a song
the tune was all off key
and people made faces at me
I guess I sang the song wrong.
So than I tried telling a tale
of a captain and a white whale
but the people they did cry
when the captain did die
and they did start to look rather pale.
So I thought I'd try one more time
and I stood there and started to rhyme
a poem I made on the spot
and the applause that I got
made me proud to say the poem was mine.
Author notes
I agree. Elvenfairy
Well I tried to make a somewhat funny poem, but I think I failed. Hope you liked it anyways! Good to see you back ladypegasus
A contest entry
- Make me Roll with Laughter PLEASE by Lady-Pegasus.
1200 points, ended December 4, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i like it alot, its wonderful!
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nice
liked that alot...entertaining...it was great -
Lol fucking awesome I LOVE IT
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This is a nice limerick, and one I can relate too. For a couple years I played sax with two bands. I had a lot of great times, a lot of great venues, but yes, a bad one or two as well. Trust me, we've played for frowning old people (I guess funk just wasn't their thing), and had a reunion show once where none of us even saw each other for months until standing on that stage, and some ugly sounds brought a very silent crowd.
As for your last stanza, the greatest moments of my life have been those grand solos you make up on the spot. The solos where you have no idea where they came from, the only thoughts coming from your mind are those perfect phrases, and the crowd is going wild.
I could probably even relate to your second stanza too. Our guitarist told a funny story on stage once, and received a silent stare.
Good poem though. It got me thinking and rambling about memories- that's a sign of good poetry, is it not?
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I think you did a wonderful job with this poem!!!
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enjoyed it keeping my attention from beginning to end ....the smooth flow of words is also appreciable
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Cute write. Congrats on being a finalist in the contest. Nice job.
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Thank you
it is rather cute indeed, but please review the rules once, you missed a vital one or two. Also, the first line :along not allong, I think hat is the only one i saw at first read. I will be reviewing the poems at least once more before final call so feel free to edit as requested or desired. Thank you for the WB! Good luck!
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I looked over the list of rules again and made adjustments, are there any other ones I seem to have missed?
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