let my lips brisk your velvet neck let my arms wrap around your beautiful body feeling the warmth of your skin melting my vampire skin the smell from you is exhilarating it makes my dead heart beat to life being around you has made me want to make you mine till the end of time be mine be what i am stay with me my love will be eternity nothing has compared to you in my years of life let my teeth bite into your velvet skin letting the blood drip into my mouth and onto the ground let this rose remind you of your old life let this kiss be the start of your life with me now lets fly into the dark into the moon to are new dream
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I must say, for the content and theme, this is chilling! You've achieved the thought status of a vampire with all the blood-curdling details.
Well written overall. You have a spellcheck in your program here, so make friends with it.
Also, I would put this in poetic clips. the form reads more like prose.
Hope those suggestions help.
Thank you for posting!
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