There is color,
Brilliant fantastical color
Festering in deep hues
That bubble up explosive emotion
And tighten knots in fluttering bellies...
There is wind,
Flustering gusts of wind
That plunder rhythms
In seductive arrogance's
Naked motion caress...
There is light,
Tiny golden embers of light
Glowing in warm raptures of happied life
As the calmed beauty in darkness pulls in close...
There are clouds
Restless desire filled clouds
Who skate abound a faithful sky
In purple blankets of adulterine love...
And there is the Moon
Hiding tufts of silver flare
The shy twinklings
A softened familiar console has to hold.
O, what beauty taints the shadows of this Night.
A contest entry
- Fully by Mari Goes.
1300 points, ended November 22, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great description & choice of words! Brilliant.
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"brilliant color
festering
explosive
flustering
seductive
embers
raptures
darkness
desire
faithful
silver
beauty"
MariGoes, a nice progression indeed.
Your work is awesome.
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It is a lovely picture that you show. The images are clear and strong, almost like a moment coming to life. You paint the portrait, remembering at the end to add the moon, the centerpiece of your canvas. Thank you for presenting that artwork here.
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There is a logical procession of course, to this poem, skilfully done (in my opinion.) Facile language lends to the scene, to the process of the poem as it reaches the culmination...the introduction of the moon. The last line in intriguing...these objects you've shown us, they are beautiful even in their dramatic scenes, tainted is an interesting and highly subjective word here...ironic even, for without beauty to guide us, it might seem tainted, or at least, infused...thank goodness for art and the ability to express and appreciate it.
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BEAUTIFUL USAGE OF WORDS...
WRITTEN WITH A GOOD IMAGERY...
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I that the second line in each stanza reiterates and builds upon the first line. That was very creative! The moon seems to inspire a lot of poets on AllPoetry, yours is especially good! Good luck in the contest!
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