A boy
A girl
Three years
Of friendship
Little did he know
That she loved him
One day
Three words
A lie
A truth
A love
A friendship
A hope
Love
1 spot
1 time
LOVE
Author notes
the first part is all true. I had a crush on a guy from my camp (miley HIS NICKNAME!) i told him then he told me the same THEN HIS STUPID *bunny* FRIEND MADE HIM BREAK UP WITH ME CUZ HE LIKED ME! I DON'T EVEN KNOW HIS FRIEND!!!! I HATE YOU AUSTIN!
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unique!!
Good poem, but the three words is what confuses me, there's three stanzas, before love, but not three words. Quite stirring though. Either put more detail, or reword it instead of three make it "two words". I ask the same question here what lie? what truth? Coudl you be more clearer, for this quite broad generalities. The plot is well penned, but needs detail.
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so true. a great write for sure. I hope that you find a way to get back at him.
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I do like the form of this poem. The short, one word or phrase lines are good for conveying the succinctness of this poem. However, towards the end, I find that the story becomes hard to follow. Everything up to the lines "One day
Three words" is easily understood; however, after this stanza, I begin to become confused. What is happening? I am lost in the story. What lie? What truth? Reading your back story I can understand a little more, but it's still hard to comprehend through the words you give us in the poem. My suggestion is to keep the simple structure of the poem, but to rewrite the last few stanzas in a way that continues the plot instead of just acting as a word. Good job.
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