When you came to visit I planted a rose
a golden rose of peace.
I watched it grow its leafy show
change colour and play in the breeze.
And then this morning, hidden away,
a fat bud peeked and nodded; G day,
then another, and another,
all dripping with dew,
their gold shining through
and I thought about you.
A contest entry
- Bandit Dedications! by The Poetic Bandits.
900 points, ended November 25, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful piece for a beautiful poet. Lovely sentiment.
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You are right of course, thank you
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Ronnica,
What a wonderful tribute poem for a dear Bandit sister. Love the progression and the rhyme, well done my friend! Congrats on the gold trophy!
Bandits Rock!
Brother Dennis
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This is a lovely dedication to Alby I really like the idea of wrapping this poem around the growth of a rose - very beautiful
thank you for this entry!
Keep writing
Polly
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Precious~
Oh My this is a Beauty of a piece penned~ Love the whimsical images
Wonderful use of rhyme also~
This will bring forth smiles one cannot help but feel the gold shining through
Love this!!
Thank You for sharing Your Voice and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This was just beautiful and it makes one wish to find out more about the person you are speaking of ( not sure who it is since you don't specify in your author's notes and I am not a member of your group). Wonderful write, a pleasure to read!
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I normally jump when a bright coloured background appears but this was so lovely with the golden rose I didn't
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Outstanding
I have just had a beautiful red rose blossom in the garden -despite its being November and your poem reminded me of it. I will have to check out some of Alby's poetry. I loved the lyrical flow, the delicate imagery you chose and the message. Best of luck in the contest.
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Lovely verse about someone on this site and in this group. Enjoyed the flow and the sentiments expressed in these lines. Easy to read and understsand as well.
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More big smiles...As soon as I read this I knew you had changed the ending. A lovely added touch, adding a dusting of thought at the end. Thank you so much for this poem, I treasure it and hope your roses bloom every year so they will remind you of me. alby
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Beautiful, soft and delicate. Very touching. I will have to find out about Alby as well.
Love & light
Debbera
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Thank you D she is Albymy heart, one of the best poets on A P.
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Awww.... (sob!)
This is lovely. I'd love to know who Alby is... I must go and investigate.
Love the simplicity of words here, but they evoke a profound feeling of love and fellowship. Lovely jubbly!
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Not our Pam but Glad you liked it.
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Very lovely, and having read Alby, I think it is quite fitting! A very nice lyrical flow, and a good read.
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