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Dear Moon

     

 

 

        Dear Moon,     

 

 

        This world is cold but we have danced before

in darker times when waltzing thawed the snow,

and now we meet again... like ancient lore.

 

I loved your many forms, from nymph to crow,

and relished contemplating our gyrations
in darker times... When waltzing thawed the snow,

I drank to melt my heart with aspirations
of waxing solar wind in pinkish moon

and relished contemplating... Our gyrations?

a [       ] and a [        ] -- blue monsoon!

a sacred symbol on our heathen minds
of waxing solar wind in pinkish moon!


through all our trials still this vision binds; --
we've lived and died for epochs to atone...
a sacred symbol on our heathen minds.

Old Soul, our timeless bond has always known
this world is cold -- but we have danced before!
we've lived and died for epochs to atone,
and now we meet again... like ancient lore.

 

eternally,

your

troubadour

 

 

 

Author notes

 

The empty brackets represent the ommission of sacred symbolism from the public release of this poem.  Just imagine an iamb or maybe a spondee in lieu of revealing my secret.

 

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 16
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    From one "old soul" to another, it pleases me immensely to know that you can now waltz and sway with the moon whenever the fancy strikes you, Julien. I'm quite sure she's filled out her dance card with only one name - being yours, of course. She does orbit wisely, after all.


  • Fare thee well fine poet. Fare thee well.


  • mwilson50
    July 16

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    Powerful, entrancing

    What abilities this writer possess(ed) - amazing. Makes me feel his loss even more keenly. Left behind some special magic in words, symbols or no symbols.

  • RechercheCadaver
    November 21, 2008

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    Indeed, the moon is wrapped in foggy lore. It reminds me of a quote in which myth is said to overpower reality. We tolerate the cold winds of reality for the myths. Love the imagery in this piece. It has the dreamy qualities associated with the moon.


  • Cat
    November 18, 2008
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  • Nangaleema
    November 17, 2008

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    "waxing solar wind in pinkish moon" - i love that! the imagery here is lovely. i especially enjoyed: "This world is cold but we have danced before
    in darker times when waltzing thawed the snow."
    and the rhythm of the piece is melodic. nifty write.


  • MargaretG
    November 16, 2008

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    This is magnificent. I see what you mean about the last seven lines, this one keeps the pattern all the way through. Well done. I particularly like "I drank to melt my heart" and the lovely iambic meter. I don't understand what is in the brackets - I have heard the axiom about assuming.


    • Victory Gin silver member
      November 16, 2008
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      Thank you Margaret. It makes sense to have an author's comment to explain the brackets and I have added one. I share a similar enthusiasm about said axiom.


  • masterblaster gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    Hi, very beautiful, you get better by the minute lol, regards Di


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    oh that little man spinning up there risen in my night
    he makes me shine only quarterly and smiles at those who can take flight

    i always felt like it was the moon that you see when you die... i dont know why.. but it was a little kidhood dream i had that i have never shed and have it often through life.

    just where you took me

    i adored the sacred section

    • Victory Gin silver member
      November 16, 2008

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      ...a bird finds his way to another world and builds his nest in the moon. He has no wings other than the vapor that falls upon night in winter. If expanded too much he ceases to exist but has forged a crater in his roost visible to those wine drinking dreamers in the forest...

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