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If God Was A Hippie

I created the heaven and the earth,
No room for darkness I turned on the light.
Each star I placed in the heavens above,
Each river and lake with colours of love.

Tears flooded the skies,
Through day and by night
I created humans with the dust from the ground
Then I turned on my stereo blasting with sound.

Before I carried on I drank a pint of beer,
Then painted the mountains that I love so dear.
I covered the earth with the bluest seas
The moon I made out of a block of cheese.

I made the weather both hot and cold,
Then made the sun out of a pot of gold.
Each planet I formed from galaxy bars
Then stopped a while as I ate a Mars.

Then I planted some grass (not the smoking kind)
Then made some rails for skaters to grind.
I told the animals to go forth and multiply
Then I made humans, but I don't know why.

I had to make for Adam a bonny lass
Adam was fussy and a pain in the ass.
Eve had to be slim with a very big pair
Adam was insistent he wanted blonde hair.

So there it was and on the seventh day of rest
At least I can say I tried my best.







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  • jessicams
    June 10, 2009

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    Poetic genius! This is positively adorable and I would much rather live in this world you created then the one we currently live in.
    The ending was so funny!!!

  • Lady Mak
    November 24, 2008

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    A very cleverly thought out and amusing write, made me chuckle, I am a Christian and thanks for sharing this light hearted amusing peice...


  • Envelope
    November 23, 2008

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    eh the rhyme put me off here, it felt very juvenile-esque, playful, which i wasnt too thrilled to see, lessened the impact I was looking for, I did like the personality it instilled throughout the whole thing though, the hippy god motif really came through, and was definately the highlight here, but in the end i think it fell short of the depth i was hoping to see

  • Mickie27
    November 17, 2008
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    Can I just say thanks for your comments I actually upset someone by writing this. I guess I should just say that if you haven't got a sense of humour then you shouldn't be reading this. Our God is a great big God and He has a sense of humour.


  • apropos
    November 15, 2008
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    love it! this is excellent work poet!

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