This first sweet kiss has me in a spell of intoxicated delight!
Innocence dispels notions of fright or flight in the night,
I long to hold you near; feel your body’s energy!
Wrap me tightly in the warmth of your arms,
so I can experience the synergy of love;
it’s your presence that lifts me above.
Test me with your vigilance,
I long to see if you mean what you say.
Daily you come here asking me to stay a bit longer,
filling your time with my presence and to pay you mind.
In my recesses, tempting me with your caresses, excitedly I go,
though wanting to stay, traveling this journey of discovery with you.
I wonder if kisses to follow will allow us to hallow the wonder of lovers forever.
Words: K.Botka
11/15/08
Author notes
Thinking of my first kiss, when I was way too young to have these thoughts in my mind. I was eight & the kiss was stolen! It was stolen by someone I really liked. 
A contest entry
- Are you up for a challenge? You'll like this then. ;) (contest) by Hikari Lady.
600 points, ended November 23, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Sweet and gentle, it has kind of a sad feeling to it as well yet I found it full of beauty and imagination.
Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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Deep thoughts for an 8 year old
but the memory is beautiful as are your words... a lovey sharing within a difficult format... Bravo! All the best...
Ken
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Just Beautiful
Oh this is precious. I just loved the whole poem. It is written excellently. Oh the innocence of that first precious kiss. Just to fun. I really enjoyed this poem this morning. Of course your imagery with rhythm is just fabulous as well as punctuation in which I so admire about you. Great choice in wording in this write. Best wishes dear friend in the contest.
Much Love
With Blessings,
Kelle Marie 
ps Just trying to get caught up on trying to return the favors, thank you for all your comments and even reading my poetry..
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Oh I remember my first kiss and how it lit up my world much like this poem described. I love the way this poem is displayed on the page, quite unique. Best to you dear Bandit
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I think this is a well presented poem
I love everything about it...beautiful ~
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Such a sweet yearning shown here - I like the turning of an imagined past into a longer-for future. Some nice internal rhyme, and a good flow that captures the sweetness of the subject. Well done.
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Test me with your vigilance,
I long to see if you mean what you say.
Daily you come here asking me to stay a bit longer,
filling your time with my presence and to pay you mind.
In my recesses, tempting me with your caresses, excitedly I go,
though wanting to stay, traveling this journey of discovery with you.
I wonder if kisses to follow will allow us to hallow the wonder of lovers forever.
this is an amazing poem. the feeling of love and wonder if it is realy true, if it was meant. i really loved this poem and i hope to read more of your poems.
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The hourglass, words, memories, all devices catching a moment in time. The sands of memory turned inward, to mine, back to a giggly, red faced peck at eight or so. The memory spangling of course underscores the strength of your poem. Good luck in the contest!
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Great Job!
I loved the way you had the poem flow in a sort of hourglass effect, that really "caught my eye". I can't really relate much to it, though. I still haven't had my first kiss! Oh well, wonderful poem! Keep up the good work.
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Lovely! That first kiss was certainly memorable. I don't remember my first kiss. It's been so long I don't even remember my last kiss!
Excellent poem!
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I enjoyed reading this poem. This realy brings back some very hapy memories. You've got alot of talent and I'm glad you don't waste it. At least you first kiss was stolen by someone you realy liked even so young. Now I feel old, I was 15 when I had my first kiss. Anyways, sorry I'm a babbler at times. This was a great write, I'm glad I read it. Best of luck in the contest
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This is a very well crafted piece of writing, with a lovely gentle rhythm, it lingers in my head, and evokes many sweet memories of youth you encapsulate a myriad of emotions in this heavily scented poem
thankyou
littlefishone
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the first kiss is a memory most of us treasure forever. very clever how you shaped this poem and it made me remember that first special kiss too
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I'm not so clever!
The shape is one of the rules of the contest! 
This is the first time I tried this kind of a shape [I forget what this style is called] & I thought this would be too much for me, but once I got started I couldn't stop! Thanks for stopping by & reading! This is a dream of what my first special kiss would've been like!
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Awww..this is so sweet. First kisses are always so special.
You explain your story so well, I could see clear pictures of what happened years ago with you. That's the best thing about poetry, capturing moments that were lost in time and saving them this way so we can cherish them again, when ever we want to. A sweet write that has a lovely flow to it, and with beautiful details
Good luck to you in the contest and keep writing
Much love,
Alyzeh
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LOL....
You should read the AN! This wasn't my first kiss! I'm a poet & I'm going with the prompt & my romantic ideals. Glad you like the write & found it detailed enough to have felt it as though it was the reality! I wish I could say that this was a 'true life' experience, but, alas alack, it's not! Thanks for reading & the compliments! -
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Oh! My bad! Hahaha! Dang it, I always comment before reading those. =) Well then, your an excellent poet for creating vivid imagery in my head, almost making it seem real!
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good
I was madly in love with a little girl all thru grade school who never knew it. I never kissed her til the ago of 24 when we reconnected- and the kiss seemed to satisfy the longing I held for so long, but love had faded as had time.
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True love takes time!
Glad you had the chance at that kiss & sure hope you find 'that one kiss' that will define true love! Thanks for reading & your comment!
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Oh, I found it- and we had 42 years of bliss. She told me every day of our marriage,"I love you,...." Five children & 14 grandchildren.
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Kathleen Beautiful !
memories that you cherished are laid down so beautiful.
words that brought me back through time were of innocence, thank you so much for this tender write!
Bless you Kathleen,
Rend
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Oh my....
No one seems to read the Author's Notes! I'm glad that this write seemed to be factual. That shows that it has the intensity of true feelings that readers can identify with on an inner level. Thanks for that realization. 
I wish I could say this was real life. My first kiss was stolen from me when I was about 7 or 8 & I had none of these feelings even remotely in my mind or heart! Thanks for stopping by, your read & comment!
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