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Murmurs of EgoEvo

Cut me out of this cocoon
encasing gargoyle aspirations
awaitting emancipation
  as murmurs and moans
begat metamorphosis

Author notes

prompt : murmurs

yeah, its shite, hope to return with more befitting.

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  • Glasyalabolas
    December 16, 2008

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    I like short pieces that are so full of thought, and even though you say this is shite (which it isn't), this is such a piece. A strong feeling of being trapped and frustration coming from this piece.

    Good write.


  • Glasyalabolas
    November 16, 2008
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    Thanks for the entry. I will comment fully when contest has ended (though this is certainly not shite), but the only thing I can say is that the piece must have the title prompt as it's title, as per the contest rules.

    Many, many thanks.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 16, 2008

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    i have no idea what i just read here, and why you keep calling your work shite lately man, it is good, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

  • Glasyalabolas
    November 15, 2008
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    No worries.

    Title Prompt No.21: "Murmur"

    Many thanks.