as the thunder rolls and the clouds break
sending down to earth their much needed rain
i've chosen not to fade
as the ocean roars and the wind blows
sending a strong breeze through our barren lands
i promise i won't break
as my heart beats, and we run to face our enemies
for you i will stand
i won't fall
i can't
not yet
i won't break
i'll stand
because every day is my second chance
i'll stand
because i'm stronger
more than you'd believe
more than what you said I'd be
i'll stand
as my hands move
as my friends die
as my body wreaks with pain
i'll be
when every last light fades
i will be... here
i won't break
i can't
because deep down inside you know that this is what i was born for
to fight
to fight for you
emancipation - proclamation - declaration
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to the troops
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Powerful stuff!
Real power and strength behind your words, I trust you and feel your constant presence, resilience. I love the message here and the way you present it - no matter what.
Could you touch it up a bit? Cut out superfluous words like the 'what' in "I'm stronger than what you think". Makes me sound like an English teacher but full-stops are magic for making thinkgs sound more final, like a promise. Something you can rely on.
To fight -
To fight for you.
It means the end, no messing. I'll fight for you. You alone. Know what I'm saying? Punctuate!
Being a Brit I haven't heard empd before but I get a real sense of what it stands for here. I love "I have chosen not to fade" the way you assert YOUR choice.
Great stuff alex!
I love it!
*~Huntress~*
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empd means: emancipation - proclamation - declaration
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thnks! I'm trying my best while trying to finnish a novel
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i won't break
i'll stand
because every day is my second chance
i'll stand
because i'm stronger that what you think<
i'll stand
because deep down inside you know that this is what i was born for
to fight
to fight for you
Wow..this is so true. nice jobb -
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thnks
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