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[ benvolio thy lothing boy ]

benvolio thy lothing boy
tybalt thy keen
an then in all theres Mercutio stuck in beetween
tybalt in hartened
mercutio in poverty an praved in wars
benvolio the peace maker of only for his soul
thy hearts all there all diffrent but combined in strength an shamed in weekness

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  • Lauren Noir
    December 6, 2008

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    A few spelling errors, but I really liked this. It was different and really well written. Though the line breaks were a little erratic, I really liked this.

    You got all the characters lovely

    Thanks, well done and good luck