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The Divine Science Fair Project

Alone in the dark void
pondering over creation
unassuming consciousness deployed
nothingness deviation
let there be light and nothing sputters
until ethereal hands upon closed shutters
lighted nothing, young god still bored
finds dust and a bottle near his locked door
clumsy hands spilling the contents so clear
apprehensive hands forming in fear
the mixture of the dust and the water
this thing suspended in the hands of the father
trying so hard to make remedy to the mess
watching the growth with wonder and stress
the now slightly older god raids his old man's stash
the brazen youth brash
proceeds to great inebriation
looks around through odd perception
finding a monkey fallen down from his tree
spoke in his voice so omnipontently
"wonder what happens if he can run
grab big sticks and a mind not so dumb?"
And the monkey thus became a man
saw another with food, and ran
finding large branches, new found smarts
snuck up and pierced his new enemies heart
young god laughed so uproariously
the combination of booze and lack or air
brought on unconsciousness you see
dreaming now, world left to fair
on it's own, free of guidance
god woke up by chance
in time to see two bright flashes
on this new world of chances
these explosions flashed brilliantly
for they were Hiroshima and Nagasaki
He had left too much out of the equation
now man possesses tools of devastation
greater than the tantrums god throws
the latest being Katrina along the gulf coast
though the world is wrecked, it will endure
until the day man is pushed to far for sure
and the true meaning of hellfire unleashed for all
as we degenerate in the irradiated glow
god gasps in horror, at the insanity of man's fall
"I won't have a science fair project this eon after all"

Author notes

this is a clean version of a story of the creation and why our world is the way it is I came up with one night. I got a good laugh, though almost everyone else was highly disturbed.

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    November 23, 2008

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    eh this felt very "run of the mill" , iT had a nice flow to it, and read aloud was alot more impactful, but reading it I zoned out a few times and kinda had to force myself to keep reading. Plus the message here was a little too common. The science fair metaphor though was a nice touch but it didn't really come out all that much in your body, and left the rest of the poem wandering in that space between preachy and cliche.