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The 7 Odd Family Relations

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In a competitive world,
lust is a must!
Without it-
the human race would end,
tho sometimes it's painful-
other times it's a delight,
still lust is a must!!


Gluttony sneaks in,
right around the corner-
walking past trash,
instead of picking it up-
I stuff it in my mouth,
and want more.

My dear friend is greed,
this is why I work-
day in and day out.
It makes me zealous,
without it-

I wouldn't have anything.

At the end of the day ,
I'm drained from greed.
I still want more,
leading me to exhaustion-
I become,
a victim of sloth-
because,
I still don't have anything,
and stagger on feeling numb....

 

I think more of,
what I don't have-
wrath comes out to play,
making me hate all...
they all have something I don't!!
I'd do anything for it...

Inside greed starts building up,
I want to be like them.
I long for their life-
I even want their soul!
All be damned if I am going to sit,
and wait for them to give it to me-
If I want it then it's mine,
no one can stop me-

not even this gold trophy,

that I'm working for-

I know it's mine anyway...


I know that I can have everything,
anything within my reach is mine!
Some may call it pride...
but I call it lessons in humility-
because they suffer not me 

Everyday is repeated-

the same way,
in the end-

I lack nothing!

 


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2, Write about all the sins and their relation to you.

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Comments

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24
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    Wow.. this was amazing.
    Brilliantly penned
    and so creative.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • leander Moderators member
    December 30, 2008
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    Holy crap sweety!
    How much have I missed of your writes?! This is beautiful!

  • Ylova silver member
    December 11, 2008

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    WOWZERS! This is incredible. Congratulations on the Gold. Well deserved. Amazing. I second diver's comment. I absolutely, totally LOVE your style of writing! Keep it flowing

    Much love
    Ylova


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    wow definitly worthy of the gold...i love ur style!!!


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    This was an excellent poem! Usually long ones bore me unless they have an amazing message or rhythm. This one I read straight through with eagerness!

    Excellent write- full of honesty. Great work!

  • maralisa silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    a briliant take onthe promt you have captured the seven deadly sins with a powerful impact good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • Victory Gin
    November 15, 2008
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    no matter how you get it.... if you get it you got it... like I said, there are many paths. words are confusing. probably why birds of a feather flock together... we all have our own mindsets. The way we are wired is responsible for the shape we project... sometimes co-mingling shapes create beautiful hedrons that are invisible to science and sometimes they resemble crude machinery but we are all beautiful, individual and unique and that is LOVE... in earth or water or bile or wherever -- LOVE: The beautiful machinery of night, the vast interconnectedness, the storehouse of everything -- the most simple and yet most abstract thing... Love.

  • Valley Girl silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    Wow! Awesome write! I love how you have incorporated the 7 sins into one awesome write! Thanks for sharing sis! Good luck in the contest.


    • Kari gold member
      November 15, 2008
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      Thanks for your comment sis
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