Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

When Acting became Action

I:


  Stage one,
presses me to you
     trying to get up

II:

  Director calls cut
saying we're just teenagers without a clue
           [never knowing love]

III:

The curtains close,

everyone wants to see

          who we really are

 

VI:

 

but we cut scenes

and run though the doors.

  

      [we'll define the rest,

                                 later  ]

Author notes

word count: 48
prompt: impulse.

hope this is good enough.

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 5 of 5

  • written-in-ink
    November 24, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    love how you set this up

    made it very
    very interseting
    and i think that you did an amazing job with it

    thank you so much for entering and
    i wish you luck
    <33


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I'm with MJ! Brilliant hun... just wow!


    ♥


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Brilliant! I'm so proud of you Stephanie.

    All the best,
    mj.


  • maralisa silver member
    November 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    a brilliant take onthe promt you have set the scenes wonderfully good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 15, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    lol, i like this poem it is impulse alright, you did a killer job on this, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

1 - 5 of 5