Endeavoring to unlock the keys to the universe
we traverse, streaking through the heavens;
past the full moon of our oblivion,
looking for answers that are driven in our souls.
Seeking for solutions to the lack of being whole,
we travel far and wide, for what in us resides;
not wanting to take the time to examine,
what many consider famine, for the emptiness that betides!
Man given the innate desire to fathom the depths
of all types of space, inside and out;
reaches past what’s right before his face,
neglecting to see the rest!
What’s seen can deceive the eyes,
when lack of vision brings with it lies;
theory based on ignorance,
of He Who brought forth magnificence!
We endeavor, despite our leisure,
to contemplate eternal fate;
traveling into space,
neglecting the human race and He beyond all measure!
Words: K.Botka
11/15/08
Author notes
Jer 29:13 And ye shall seek Me, and find Me, when ye shall search for Me with all your heart.
Pr 8:17 I love them that love Me; and those that seek Me early shall find Me.
Isa 58:1 Cry aloud, spare not, lift up thy voice like a trumpet, and shew my people their transgression, and the house of Jacob their sins.
2 Yet they seek Me daily, and delight to know My ways, as a nation that did righteousness, and forsook not the ordinance of their Elohim: they ask of Me the ordinances of justice; they take delight in approaching to Elohim.
3 Wherefore have we fasted, say they, and Thou seest not? wherefore have we afflicted our soul, and Thou takest no knowledge? Behold, in the day of your fast ye find pleasure, and exact all your labours. {labours: or, things wherewith ye grieve others: Heb. griefs}
4 Behold, ye fast for strife and debate, and to smite with the fist of wickedness: ye shall not fast as ye do this day, to make your voice to be heard on high.
5 Is it such a fast that I have chosen? a day for a man to afflict his soul? is it to bow down his head as a bulrush, and to spread sackcloth and ashes under him? wilt thou call this a fast, and an acceptable day to Yah?
6 Is not this the fast that I have chosen? to loose the bands of wickedness, to undo the heavy burdens, and to let the oppressed go free, and that ye break every yoke? {the heavy...: Heb. the bundles of the yoke} {oppressed: Heb. broken}
7 Is it not to deal thy bread to the hungry, and that thou bring the poor that are cast out to thy house? when thou seest the naked, that thou cover him; and that thou hide not thyself from thine own flesh?
8 Then shall thy light break forth as the morning, and thine health shall spring forth speedily: and thy righteousness shall go before thee; the glory of Yah shall be thy rereward. {be...: Heb. gather thee up}
Joh 1:1 In the beginning was the Word, and the Word was with Elohim, and the Word was Elohim.
2 The same was in the beginning with Yah.
3 All things were made by Him; and without Him was not any thing made that was made.
4 In Him was life; and the life was the light of men.
5 And the light shineth in darkness; and the darkness comprehended it not. {comprehended: or, did not admit, or, receive}
A contest entry
- Endeavor - photo prompt by thelordreigns.
550 points, ended December 13, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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A fascinating perspective that I'm happy to read!
However, I have to admit that I've personally always considered religion and belief in a higher 'force' (please don't be offended, I'm expressing an opinion, just as you were...) to be people's way to try and feel safer about their lives and the purpose of us all being here. However, I don't feel that any theories really explain the existence of human beings and the world conclusively (Another reason man is continually searching for one...) so I guess I just believe in enjoying what we have, and trying to do the best we can with our lives!
Good poem though, for sure! That really picked my brains for thoughts on the subject... it's good to have your beliefs eloquently challenged once in a while.
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Have I
eloquently challenged your beliefs?
Well...that's a very good thing from my perspective. Thanks for sharing your view & doing it so profusely. 
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Some very deep thoughts here. You have unlatched the gate and all we have to do is walk through.
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Some very deep thoughts here, to give one cause to meditate and contemplate the deep things beyond this present momentary existance.
Moses
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Well
Moses [never thought I'd have you reading my poetry] thanks for your read & comment. I scribe it as I 'hear & receive' it. 
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I am in awe of your poem. you have perfectly depicted our continued ignorance and arrogance towards God. And all done without sounding at all preachy. There is so much depth in your words, yet they are nothing but crystal clear. while reading I felt tiny and insignificant in the midst of the rest of creation. Yet we humans persevere to prove our own magnitude and forget that in the face of His might we are all but dust. I hope your poem inspires many more.
One more thing I love about your poem is that there was nothing in your poem that would make it specifically Christian. I am not a Christian and yet I found it so easy to relate to your words. You have made it universal
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Aida!
How wonderful it is to read your words. I'm a daughter child of The King of the universe & am a Music Minister/Singer/Songwriter who's now a Poet Minister on AP! It pleases me so to learn that you could find true value in what was inspired for me to write. May you find The Source of all truth and life & prosper richly!
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You capture well the "Black Hole" feeling that many experience in disfunction and feelings of self destruction. We forget who brought us forth and think we are of little worth. We seek not to participate in the gifts we can receive and instead operate from need as if we are not enough and never well be loved.
It is maturity and a result of healing to be able to understand, to meet the one you want practice being that kind of person. Two, to experience the gift of love when one meets one's soul mate, we need to practice being that kind of love in preperation.
When we are availible to be present for the immediate experience of being alive and stop arguing with how it is supposed to be and instead learn to be awed by the wonder of what is -- we will know we are loved, whole and complete.
Loved the poem Wonderous job without ever sounding preachy or condecending. You spoke with power, grace and vision. Very difficult to do and you did it very well.
Love, Tom B.
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comments are so edifying & warm. Thanks for your acknowledgment & your compliments. I do feel I'm learning how to present in a way that people can openly receive. I do the planting, He does the watering! You just made my day! -
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A tale I once heard that you may enjoy. A minister relates a dream to his congregation. I went to heaven the other day. I looked around and saw a store. I had to go in, because I could not imagine a store in heaven.
Behind the counter was an angel. I asked her,"What do you sell here?"
"Anything you might want," she replied.
" I want peace on earth, good will to men, a loveing universe," I responded.
She looked across the counter at me and nodded as I spoke. Then she looked me in the eye and told me, "I am sorry. I forgot to mention, we only sell the seeds."
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I always figure the quality of my reviews are a direct reflection of the quality of the poem. When we greet people with love and not judgement the door is always open and those that enter are transfigured.
Love,
Tom B.
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so true
so true... i agree completely... has a very spiritual feel to it, though i think anyone can relate to it. man is so busy looking at what they cannot seem to reach to see what they already have within their grasp -
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You got it!
Thanks for finding your way here & commenting.
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I like the way you handled the prompt. How true that mankind keeps looking in all the wrong places for the truth that is right in front of his face.
Shalom in Yeshua.
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Thanks
for your read & comment. Yes, we're looking to the heavens when He's given us all we need to find Him right here!
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A wonderful write indeed, in a relaxed mod
I like the soft language used in it, and the thought behind it
Well done
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Thanks
friend!
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Lovely
WHAT AN outstanding write!! the words so lovely !! the flow was pretty good!! BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN! -
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Thanks!
Glad you found your way here & like the inspiration!
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a couple more scriptures that apply, Deut 29, 29 That which is concealed belongs to God; But what is revealed belongs to us and to our children.
He has placed eternity in the hearts of men, but they cannot see his plan, from beggining to end... Paraphrased from Eclesiates. -
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So true...
and He reveals Himself to us through His creation! Thanks for finding your way here & commenting.
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Wonderful! Inspiring!
It leads me through the forest. -
Spirituality has long been rooted in Man as the proverbial carrot on a string. This is good for the search but not for the nourishment. To satisfy our hunger we must stop. We quiet our racing hearts and find a stillness in which to breathe. Your poetry speaks of such things and helps lead us to the center.
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How wonderful!
So happy you found your way here to read His inspiration to me & your comment is very edifying.
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Congratulations! A worthy win that reflects the desire of the contest holder and which also helps the entries gain more spiritual insight!
Thank you ..Warmly, CookieZeal
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Thank you dear....
it's always a pleasure to hear from you & receive your gracious comments.
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Congratulations!
It is sooo good to see this piece garner a trophy, for it is, as I said before, a wonderful poem full of heartfelt wisdom.
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ
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Truly inspirational! I loved the imagery in the lines;
'we traverse, streaking through the heavens;
past the full moon of our oblivion,'
Wordcraft at it's best!
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Excellent !
Not only is this poem exquisitely written but it also is filled with wisdom, God's Truth as it were. You also have brought alive the picture, to show us depths of the photo we cannot see with these finite eyes.
The only problem I see here is strictly technical: improper punctuation. Some poets think commas provide a pause for the reader where the writer would have an oral pause. This is not true, for the end of one line and the beginning of the next provides an automatic pause.
So, when using punctuation in poetry, it is required to be used accurately and only the beginning of sentences is to be capitalized, with the exception of proper nouns: otherwise, use no punctuation at all, in which case each line must begin with a capital letter. If you want a pause within a sentence use a dash or . . . dots: in this way proper punctuation is maintained.
If Gold means defining the picture to the letter in a well-crafted and well-penned poem, then this piece is worthy of gold consideration!
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ 
(former publisher's editor and published author)
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Thank you so much for this magnificent entry.
We have been "given the innate desire to fathom the depths." And our God has most certainly given us an unfathonable universe of beauty and inspirations.
God bless you always!
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