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Howling


In a sapphirine sky, where broken bone
Alarms the cooler hues of winter night,

The clouds unravel gauze and block the sight

Of triple visage: Maiden, Mother, Crone.

 

Deep in the wood, a haggard lunatic hunts,
But cannot see through forest canopy;
When dexter-clouds reveal the panoply

The sinister will move him when he grunts:

His willow flesh begins to stretch... It snaps
As muscles pumped with blood inflate upon
A bony frame, which grows and multiplies.
His clothes are ripped into pathetic scraps
As Mother's light reveals the path whereon
He howls until he breaks and falls and cries.

 

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 16
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    I always enjoyed it so when you and Rob would both reference the crone in your works. Lesser people might find it an offensive term, but that is only because they do not possess your impeccable heart and incredible quill, Julien.



  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    Oh wow! Where to begin!Awesomesauce has to be the first word used to describe this! The imagery is so dark, raw and gritty, bleeds from every line. The best darn form I've read! It is a sonnet right? Not all that up on forms, only tried a few and boy the migraines! Wicked work!


  • jantastic gold member
    November 15, 2008
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  • just mercedes gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    I'm loving it, so clever. I like the dexter/sinister play, and the triple aspect of the Mother, along with your final line, made me realise how uncomfortable it must be, to be a man.

    Impeccable rhythm, rhyme and presentation, of course. Images and word-choice are co-dependent; your work makes me see this relationship differently.

    Powerful stuff.


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    no you can't darn it.. cuz i say so
    um... i just had to because of your author notes...
    ok anyway, moving on....

    deaths no stranger to that wound which bled
    i fear those woods where this beast has tread

    (did i say i love the background under the background yet?)

    he shall be last as you were first
    of all the loves, yet, if at times my thirst
    seems uneasy it strives against the shade


    i loved ' bony frame, which grows and multiplies'
    the most
    (ohhh american warewolf in london.... i love that song and well now you have gotten it stuck in my head!)
    *wooo hooo warewooooolf in london...ahhhwooo hooo warewolf in london...*
    *dances like she just dont care*
    lol

    (and on the serial note... this took me to a deeper place of not being comfy in your own skin)

    • Victory Gin silver member
      November 15, 2008

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      Warren Zevon's dead, baby, Zevon's dead. Sorry.. a little play on pulp fiction.

      I love how you leave poetry in your comments... really a beautiful thing.

      Thank you.


      @};--,--


      • Grunts Girl gold member
        November 15, 2008

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        1. love the moon...
        B. yeah the black is working for me much better too... though you may notice that most of my backgrounds are dark or grey dark or blu dark or red dark....
        um... anyway..

        omg... you went there...
        poor zevon... and of all things asbestos? wtf????
        'stumpy' i think is what they called him...i watched a cool documentary on the last album he did wind something or just wind.. or in the wind or - ok there i go again.. you get my idea though.
        and omg
        you pulp fictioned me? no body does that and gets away with it... nobody

        "You, Flock of Seagulls. You know why we're here?"


        dis means wahr

        (yes another quote from the master himself,
        bugs bunny)

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