we often receive things
wrapped up with baubles, bows
sprinkles of this & that
layered-up with buttercream life
filled with raspberry-lipped compote daydreams
- have you ever pushed your nose against the patisserie window
breathed a heavylung mouth shape
& just wished?
desire comes with salivation
itching on the end of your tongue
spongified eyes dip into the centre
- but you don't really want to spoil it
fingers and face push forwards
squished to destruction
a desolate dalliance becomes the emergent being
and all the dreams she had
of love and wanton filled hearts
now crushed
like the sponge around her mouth
'babydoll-faced' despair
that is pitiful
she: sings songs in her head
and outloud too
"someone left her cake out in the rain"
Author notes
thanks Suzi for the prompt and the nudge i needed 
In a list
A contest entry
- Women Need Chocolate by Luna Tique Fringe.
1000 points, ended November 30, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i loved reading this...
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This is beautiful and sweet, reminds me of birthdays and happiness.
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OMG Gilly this is just grand...such lovely words from a lovely poet and images abound throughout this piece. On one hand it makes me feel warm and cozy and on the other I feel a lingering sense of need and want and desire for new beginnings. I really enjoyed this alot...sorry I missed it.
♥Becky♥
We really do come out of life on the other side a stronger person...
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this is so well worded and beautifully penned
but now I'm salivating...any cake left?
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"fingers and face push forwards
squished to destruction
a desolate dalliance becomes the emergent being
and all the dreams she had
of love and wanton filled hearts
now crushed"
this would and has sent me to the bar.
i drooled over this..hehe
thanks for sharing
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Oh, this is gorgeous. Missed reading you!!
Yes, okay, we're lost in our own little world right now but you're not forgotten! Thinking of you and speaking of you fondly.
Send me an IM and let me know how you're going.
Lots of love
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I have missed you lately...my loss...this is a melting in the dark... kind of poem... but the recipe is not ever lost...PK
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enjoyed this so much..i love the heavylung mouthshape...lol
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thankie Ma'am
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This is my second helping of your poetic pattisserie...tasted earlier but was lost for words...stop smilin' Gilly...honest injun ...sometimes it happens to this rambler lol...especially liked desire comes from salivation...mouthwatering metaphors...served with a slice of the book of life..sweet...sweet as one of those tempting but oh so naughty yellow-iced Yum-Yums...and baked by your own fair hands...
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oohh thank you so much Yvetter, as always you're a total star with your uplifting words and kindness
thank you so much
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that last line had me singing...
as excellent a cake baked as ever
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oohh you are so biased!!! lmao
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you know how to bake poetry, that's for sure, gilly and i could taste this one, with my nose against the monitor, lol
i like it that "she" is singing like this!
beautiful, my friend, just like you
~ Nicolette
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i sing very loudly and badly too. but hey ho, i still enjoy it
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I love you. Did I mention that?
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i love you too
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not a cake, but a piece perhaps? I loved this hon.
Been thinking of you.
Suzi's the best, roses in icing, me thinks.
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you can have a whole cake if you like luv
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Perhaps you need to make a spare cake for the rest of us C
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awww sure thing Chez... thanks darlin
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'desire comes with salivation
itching on the end of your tongue
spongified eyes dip into the centre'
under all the frosting i found that which i posted above...
is there such thing as a meat cake?
this is the meat of your write..
i stayed here and pondered so many things within myself it was crazy.
spongified eyes... fuck me girl... that alone stands
yeah i said fuck me girl lol... dont look at me like that - yeah with that.. oh no ... girl..
YOU fuck me... reply....
ok um... sorry ... got carried away in a make believe conversation which i have often.
i loved this
could you tell?
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uh huh!!
and so you said fuck!! so fucking what... lmao
fuck me... LOLOLOL
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yeah... i am all pent up needing chocolate now...
hee heee
maybe i will go do some window shoppin' too -
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yum yum
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this is wonderful poetry gillian
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ohh thank you!!!
so.... will you do me now!?? huh
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I have no suggestions really
except..ahem, pass whatever is left of that cake.
I'm hormonal.
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sod off!! it's my cake!!! hehhehehehehe
thankie bootylicious one
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truly wonderful
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thank you my little stargirl
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