I've tried so hard to win your heart
running out of reasons to fly
I know I fell for you from the start
and hope I never have to say goodbye.
There are no walls we can't break through
in my heart you'll always be loved by me
Through the good & bad I'll stay true
if you would open your eyes to see.
You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile.
I'm not like all the rest
you will see that I am not the same
I will pass with flying colors through true love's test
and bring you forever out of the rain.
I know the distance between you and I
is great though I will never fade away
It's your heart and compassion I won't deny
with you I plan to show love in that special way.
I know you have issues with trust
but I can promise you now
I am a man not wanting lust
and I will prove that to you somehow.
No matter how long it takes
I'll be here not holding a disguise
Even if my heart breaks
I'll be waiting with tear-filled eyes.
In a list
A contest entry
- "Prewrites " + Plus by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 67 entries
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Comments
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This poem is BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
And very touching and full of honesty and love.
thank you very much for writing this poem!!!
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hmmm.... interesting :-)
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I love this it is so sweet and heartfelt. I don't have a favorite part or favorite line because I really enjoyed the whole piece. Great write!
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This is so sweet! Good luck in my contest!
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Aww this was too sweet of a poem, it kind of reminded me of the quote:
"I dropped a tear in the ocean, the day I find it, is the day I will stop loving you."
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But the thing is you will never find that tear so your love is eternal, this poem reminded me of that quote and I didn't remember it until now, and you reminded me of this.
Aw this was so sad, pure poetry at it's finest.
This is very impressive to me I liked this.
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Ah..very pure poetry you brought..the last line is the affirmation you made and that is really very impressive one..well done...
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true love expressed in true words..enjoyed it with appreciable rhyme and smooth flow of words...
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My favorite:
You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile.
Very beautiful poem.
Reminds me of my Daniel...
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Very nice and heart felt writing.
Very pleased to read this though I did get choked up a little.
I will pass with flying colors..........I relly like that thought.
Good luck!
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long but very good!
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i love the last two lines
great right goo luck in the contest -
A very well written poem and easy to see it is written from the heart.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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awh , damn i lovvee it, its breathtaking .
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This is so romantic. I wish I was the person you were talking to in this poem. This is such a great poem. Keep up the writing!
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VERY BEAUTIFUL""
A MOST INSPIRING, INTRIGING, AND ROMANTIC LOVE POEM.CLD FEEL THE EMOTIONS IN THIS WRITE..AND SUCH A BEAUTIFUL WRITE TOO~~~"GOD BLESS"...LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW...
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"Even if my heart breaks
I'll be waiting with tear-filled eyes."
Beautiful. I'm not a big rhyme person, but I like the last stanza. Way to wrap it up. Good luck in that contest.
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this is a really good poem!!! I must say that I would love for a guy to say that to me. The emotions that you potrayed in this are extravigant, and very touching!!! wish I could give you more then three applause
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This has the feel of a pop song. I find it nice and simple.
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Heartfelt
I really liked this, there was such heart wrenching feeling behind your words. The last verse;
"No matter how long it takes
I'll be here not holding a disguise
Even if my heart breaks
I'll be waiting with tear-filled eyes. " really got to me.
Well written, the way you put all this together is astounding. I wish I could pen something this deep. Well Done! -
Lovely. Another very fitting poem for you AP name.
Enjoyed this read. Best of luck in the contest. 
Delila
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I wanted to put something in the verdict but, i am speechless. I know that feeling. People push you away only because they don't want to hurt again. I Thank you for writing everything I haven't been able to myself.
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good poem. i like the last stanza. well, i like the whole thing.
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this is so beautifully written
these lines touched me the most.
"I know you have issues with trust
but I can promise you now
I am a man not wanting lust
and I will prove that to you somehow.
No matter how long it takes
I'll be here not holding a disguise
Even if my heart breaks
I'll be waiting with tear-filled eyes. "
Joann
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wow, i like this . i know how this feels to have someone you love so much and you want to show them you are differant and that you love them and they just shove you away and it hurts
very good
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This is SO amazing!!!I loved it!!!!Bravo!!
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this is very beautiful, a real showing of true love
keep it up, im sure this person will soon see how strongly you feel and how pure your heart it
this made my heart swell,just perfection
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You did a great job on this.I like the way you have written this.You spoke from the heart and what is in your soul to write about.I am glad that I got the chance to read this.
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I like this it is very well written. I like the imagery that you use. I like the wordage. The emotions. Everything. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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This is so moving, and so beautiful. It is wonderful to see a man with true love's intent within his heart...so many do not possess such a gift these days.
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nice
well done. it takes courage to declare ones love and the merits of ones faithfulness.
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Ohh... how lovely. This is such a heartfelt piece; I love it!
Your flow is very good throughout the entire poem. Even though the beats vary from stanza to stanza (and even line to line), it has a very natural flow to it. Very easy and enjoyable. Another great thing about the flow is that the rhyme scheme worked very well almost the entire time and didn't feel too forced--but stanza four's "same" and "rain" are the only pair that do not specifically rhyme. It caught my attention immediately, and depending on how you look at it, that could also work to your advantage.
The emotion is very well conveyed. I even felt it myself; that sort of empathy is rarely triggered by written pieces, so you did an excellent job with that.
I feel that the periods at the end of each stanza are rather unnecessary. If you really want them, they don't make TOO much of a difference, but I think the overall effect would be quite nice.
Very nicely done. Thank you for sharing it! (Whoever inspired this is very blessed. Lovely work.)
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i love this poem so good
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This is so moving, it did bring tears to my eyes.
You write with such compassion, you touch your readers.
You will find the right lady to love you , so don't give up.
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Very sad, heartfelt write.
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Just Beautiful
This poem is so sincere and just lovely. Oh to have a friend like this is just a taste of what Heaven is like here on earth. The whole poem flows so well and it is really so full of compassionate love, with heart and soul... I wish I could write like this. It is excellently written. Just beautiful as I said. I love the title Tear Filled Eyes and how you have that in your last sentence of your poem. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me.
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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awe, this is really sad but don't worry you make others happy such as your friends and family and one day you will find that right one don't rush it she will come to you so be patient and be ready to catch her when she falls into your arms
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great job... really sad though
someday you will make someone really happy
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Ah..this is really a piece of the heart..and you have way with your words to prove the faithfulfulness of your soul..touching write indeed...
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Why not enter it?
Great poem -- so why not enter it into the "Share your ... thoughts ... Contest? I'm still looking for 1 more poem -- or did you already enter one?
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lovely! very beautiful
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excellent write bro
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I've tried so hard to win your heart
running out of reasons to fly
I know I fell for you from the start
and hope I never have to say goodbye.
There are no walls we can't break through
in my heart you'll always be loved by me
Through the good & bad I'll stay true
if you would open your eyes to see.
You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile.
No matter how long it takes
I'll be here not holding a disguise
Even if my heart breaks
I'll be waiting with tear-filled eyes.
i love these stanzas, i can really relate to them. great poem joel, keep up the great work!
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Very sweet and heartfelt.
"You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile."
Usually when guys say things like that it sounds so unreal, but you made it sound so sincere and sweet.
Beautiful writting
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Ouch!!!that is how i felt short time ago...
I can only hope you found that undying love we all spend our lives looking for, yet few are fortunate enough to find. Whether it be in the next room, or 2,000 miles away, never give up on your undying love.
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Amazing. Absolutely beautiful. I hope you don't have to wait long. I must say I've felt like this before myself. I'm sure if you show her this she couldn't help but fall in love with you. Best of luck, I know you'll find the one.
-Steve-
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This just might be me, but it reminds me of "Walking After You" by the Foo Fighters...mostly because I was listening to it while reading this piece.
Anyways well done...this feels geninue and real, not overforced and cliche like many of the "love posts" on this site.
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wow... this is realy good, I like this very much. The way you wrote it and the words you chose strait from your heart was just perfect. I realy understand where you are coming from with this piece too on a personal level seeing as I have been through the same thing before. All I can realy say is good luck, I wish you the very best. Nice write
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You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile
loved those lines.I can tell that this came from the heart.nice -
simply breathtaking....wow....
You are as special as can be
for you I'd walk many a mile
I'd cross the widest ocean or sea
if I knew it would make you smile
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BRAVO!
One of your best poems ever. The passion & romance exuded here is typical of a true romanticist. Superb!
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AWwww this is so beautiful!!!
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Wow, this is so delicious, so inspiring; how grand-are you a hopeless romantic? hahhaaha that's a good thing to be lol thanks for sharing this with me
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omg! you made my guts scream like shyt man! tihs is so how i feel... than kyou for sharing this... one minor detail I think in this line you meant "through"instead of "true";
I will pass with flying colors true love's test
I'm so adding this to my faves
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Beautiful, such a moving poem. Always breathtakingly beautiful.
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I loved it
This amazing write keep up the great job.
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wonderfully strong in it cause, a beautiful heart felt poem my friend, keep it flowing and i hope to see more from you
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