Is that your smile painting the
moon
from a space named
there?
a silken pool of Love
tendrils
pouring over me on
this place called
here
do gloat as you have
until
the final star spills
the truth about
your adoring celestial
plan called…
us.
Author notes
Pic by REUTERS/Kevin Kolezynski (United States)
A contest entry
- Endeavor - photo prompt by thelordreigns.
550 points, ended December 13, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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There is a lot of originality in this. I liked "a space named there" and "do gloat as you have/until/the final star spills." Good write.
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Great
Powerful fantastic love. I adore it. My favorite part was; "the truth about your adoring celestial plan called us." Very well, a crimson achievement. -
Congratulations!
I am so glad to see this deserving poem garnered the Honorable trophy, Cookie! It is a great piece.
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ
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I'm thinking that this is far more profound than the photo was intended. The photo is a study in light and shadow. You poem is a message of peace. Nicely written.
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Hoodwink (lol I dont know what it means but almost everyone else put it, so I too will).... uh.. I hope its not something bad
I love this photo. It reminds me of God coming from heaven to earth.. or even that He is in both places.. even if we dont see Him.
You have written words that could inspire anyone. I love the journey from there to here to us.
Beautiful indeed.
Criss
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Forgot the happy clappies.
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100th hoodwink
The picture is beautiful. The poem is well wrritten and well spoken. Here meets there at at one spot called us. I like that. -
HOODWINKED!
Very beautiful poem with the wonder of creation. Thank you for all your work here, we appreciate you!
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100th HOODWINK
This is your special day - enjoy.
Thanks you for being such a gret greeter and for continuing to write gret poems as well.
Liked the sentiments expressed in these lines.
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(Hoodwinked!)
I couldn't even think of an idea for that prompt. You went much farther than the picture to see it in a different way!
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Hoodwink!
This is so beautiful, this whole page leaps to the reader and hangs on and the beauty you portray is just amazing. Best to you fine poet
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Hood Wink!
I was so mesmerized by this write hun, I managed to turn my eyes to the background and picture at the end and I found myself sighing as it all blends together to create a touching masterpiece
Beautiful poem!
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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I loved the form and flow of this lovely write.
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Well done!
I know. . . it's been some time since I've been on the site; so, it is with great pleasure that I've read this poem by you, Cookie. Indeed, the celestial plan called "us." Perhaps, God should have said "His," then maybe the world would not have become so selfish; or, possibly "Ours." Who knows.
Extremely well done, as usual.
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ 
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Good to see you, Bonnie! And thank you for embellishing the
'core' of this piece! Thank you.
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Flavorful Endeavor
Wow! That image must of been made to order for this piece. And you reach beyond the rime in endeavoring to reach it here in your words so...well!
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This is beautifully written. You've taken us on a wondrous journey with your words. Thanks for sharing.
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this is very beautiful!!
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Thanks so much for your entry!
This is a lovely interpretation of the photo.
It brings me hope and a "smile" as I think of God looking down and knowing "the truth about your adoring celestial plan called…us."
Thanks again....
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