innocence a child at play
run and duck and get away
up those stairs to the loft
chase he did but at what cost
the veil of innocence soon was lost
on golden hay
we had our way
as eye to eye our bodies betrayed
by gentle yearnings as we lay
the kiss in summer’s bliss
early in the morning mist
I’ll never forget or ever regret
the line I crossed, the woman I met
knowing, I’d never remain the same
in the barn, I lost and won the game
A contest entry
- Delightful Prompt Contest. by delightfulmess.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this I like very much
the veil of innocence soon was lost
on golden hay
we had our way
as eye to eye our bodies betrayed
by gentle yearnings as we lay
excellent a sensual journey
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this is a really great poem, you have a gift for rhyme, this really works, and you still told a clear and oh so true story
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Awe... I love this!
such a wonderful story told with sensational flow to your words.
Wonderfully done thank you for entering my contest.
Delila -
Wow
Sounds like first love. Just a beautiful poem with great imagery, rhyme, rhythm and flow. What a wonderful story. Up in the loft. So sweet and precious. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me. Best wishes in the contest.
Many Blessings,
Kelle Marie
PS Thank you for reading one of my poems and commenting. Sorry I got so far behind on returning the favors. I'm sure glad I came here for I truly enjoyed your poem here.
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Wonderful take on the prompt. It is innocent and earthy at the same time.
"I’ll never forget or ever regret
the line I crossed, the woman I met"
These are my favorite lines in this poem. To meet yourself after such a life altering experience is a clever way of highlighting the change from girl to woman.
Good luck in the contest!
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