release soft burden
heart knows time heals
passing tragic to yesterday
wade not with sorrow
where words whimpered through tears
hold the heart unsteady
faltering its beat
free self instead
to envelope wrapped blankets of wealth
absorbing knowledge
for comfort sought
life lessons offer maternal words
distinct mid the ebb and flow of sea tide
feathered whispers
rise and fall
in earth song
Author notes
Prompt: Let It Be - The Beatles
Background Credit: VLAD Studios
A contest entry
- Let It Be... by poet2angels.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I could not choose favorite words...Every line was beautiful...
So soft and nurturing , or that is how they made me feel ...ike the Beatles song does...
Excellent!
Lynda
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Lynda
I am so pleased you found beauty in this verse and I thank you humbly for the honor of bronze in your contest. Great prompt and great entries. I loved this contest. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Well deserved, Pamela!
As always, your poetry is sigh material here...
Lynda
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Your words of honesty shows in this work here Pamela. Nicely expressed and conveys the caring side of you. THANKS again for writing!
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Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed this one.
~Pamela
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The message comes through so gently but clearly. All the right words are there, it's a great response to the prompt. The background is as fitting as the words, so delicate and floating. "Let It Be" such an amazing prompt and one of my all time favorites. Your words reflect that same soothing melody.
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Patricia
Thank you so much. I am pleased you enjoyed and I am glad you liked the background. I fell in love with it too for this contest. Fun to write for such timeless lyrics. Thank you again for popping by. It is always a pleasure to read your words on my verse.
Thank you.
~Pamela
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You have come a ways Pam
So positive from when we first were aware of each other.
Not healed but we are certainly changed...
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Jim
Those words from you are so true - and you would know. Thank you kindly my friend. I am always honored when you visit my page. ~Pamela
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I read this in whisper It's reads quite if you try
The first three lines grabed me, so simple yet they hold a powerful message within.
This is an exellent poem penned.
Best of wishes to you alway's
Tony
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Whispered is as it should be, softly, quietly, gently. Tender is the seedling drifting, free from burdens let go.
Thank you Tony. ~Pamela
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Beautiful, descriptive images. I thought the fluency of this piece had a gentle, touching feel to it.
Loved the "feathered whispers" phrase - just implants a feeling of free and stunning secrets being released.
My lone tip would be to maybe change the word essance in the first line; it really portrayed the beginning of the piece differently I feel and it did not show as much strength as the rest of it and creativity.
But, of course, still, a luring and bold write. Great work.
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AND YOU!
Thank you so much for the read and review that made all the difference in this poem. I appreciate your insight and honesty in critique. Thank you my friend. ~Pamela
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Anytime. Congrads on bronze, well deserved fo sho.
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