He looked down his nose and he said we were wrong
Disgrace to our parents he said
His language was forceful his morals were strong
His great indignation was fed
Young people today are not what they were
When someone like him's kissing someone like her
I grinned at my girl and she grinned back at me
The grins followed kisses for sure
The cause of his outrage was easy to see
Much harder to give him the cure
The passion we showed in a clinch at his gate
A clear sign of love that is better than hate
He'd lived on his own for a great many years
And envy had torn him apart
The great green-eyed monster had played on his fears
And eaten the core of his heart
When he was a youngster he fell for a girl
When she turned him down his life fell in a whirl
And now he hates kissing and cuddling at night
And we were the target of ire
We wondered how we could ignite his delight
And set the old codger on fire
A widow who's lusty and ready for love
May happen along and give Crusty a shove
But we won't be standing and waiting to pounce
If they are canoodling outdoors
We know that t'was jealousy caused him to flounce
He'll lose it if ever he scores
The moral high ground is a poor place to be
When really your wanting a good life like me!
Author notes
"Moral indignation is jealousy with a halo."
- H. G. Wells (1866-1946)
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A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Pamela A Lamppa.
1700 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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I find the lack of indignation for his indignation refreshing; you have displayed the higher ground of understanding and forgiveness rather than condemning him as many would have gladly done.
great use of form and prompt!
good luck
ken
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Your rhyme and meter are always perfect. The pattern you have chosen keeps the story moving and gives a perfect example of someone who disparages that which he does not possess. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Chuckling. Indeed a good story and exceptionally well written sixains - as is to be expected. Wonderful flow in this perfect rhyme and you touch the prompt with whimsical truths.
Thoroughly enjoyable and a delight to read. Very well done. Thank you for this gem. Best of luck in this round. ~Pamela
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A great take on the prompt, my favorite lines;
The great green-eyed monster had played on his fears
And eaten the core of his heart
I smoothly and blithely skipped along with the poem until these lines gave me a KO punch, I loved it. Great write and best of luck in the contest.
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Oh indeed, wow.
this is a winner.
Love you
Passions
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I chuckled when I read the last two lines.
How fitting those last lines are and they tell the essence of the quote in the prompt.
Great poem, full of humour and even a shot at the judges with the GREEN-eyed monster. Ha!
Love it.
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Jeff ~ I am in awe of this. You hit the nail on the head, so to speak. No words, just admiration, dear poet.
Best of luck in the contest. God bless you.
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lol... funny... send the old codger to an old aged home an he'll prolly end up pickin up someone with a zimmer frame and a beautiful blue rinse to play lawn bowls with lol... i love the way you dont care what other people think in this piece... true love conquers all
hugs,
georgie,
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She distinctly said "no GREENS"!
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Mairi! You are one in a million!
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This was an entertaining read. Well played. I especially liked these lines.
"We wondered how we could ignite his delight
And set the old codger on fire
A widow who's lusty and ready for love
May happen along and give Crusty a shove"
An old codger should be so lucky. Thanks for sharing.
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