As I wake I immediately feel bright. I can see all, rising incredulous, anew.
The sun shines,
The sky, cloudless
And I remember that you are mine.
All is fantastic- shining brightly, though still of this Earth, this light does not blind.
Everything I can perceive,
And I want to perceive it- everything!
No time for anything today, because there is simply no time
Aimlessness is the name of the game. This maypole dance, for life is but a game.
All of this almost overwhelms. My lung fill, oxygen unobstructed, feeling warm, full.
Full of anticipation to see you soon. I consider for a moment the unhindered fullness of these emotions- emotions that, before today I didn't believe in.
An exciting, free, natural blend of compassion, awe and delight- submerging myself into everything that is wholesome, that will help me to become whole, long and balanced, the gentle ascension of horizon, spilling into the room.
So I leave the house,
with the will to vent my wonderous, new found, fearless conviction that life is everything and that I am life.
And I reach your house,
And I see your face.
Your face,
your...
Face like an angel's, emanating love, for me and for all.
I have so much to my life; so full is everything.
All this pleasure- it doesn't mean anything, it's just joyous, beautiful!
What can I do but, finally overwhelmed by the day,
Holding you close so to me, weep for joy?
Author notes
Really sorry for the length, folks. Just got carried away...
A contest entry
- The Feelings you get by ChaingangAngel.
400 points, ended November 29, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well... The length isn't really the biggest issue here - although you succeeded say the same thing in e billion different (clichéd) ways...
The message you radiate is tender and sweet though... Makes me bitter in some way probably because I miss such things in life...
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You may be right about this being a bit cliched. I only starting writing poetry a month ago, which is the reason I attribute to any of my stuff being at all derivative. I'll try to avoid this in the future, though.
if I say the same thing in different ways that is because I was trying to fulfil the contest criteria.
Glad you like the message of this, though- that is just about the only positive thing you have said about anything you have read of mine, lol.
Sorry about what I said before- I guess it was a knee-jerk reaction.
Thanks for stopping by and enjoy your new year!
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very nice
gives an an amazing feeling
and the length was just fine
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Fankoos!
I am glad it made you feel like that- I think that was what I was aiming for.
Thanks for stopping by! X
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sounds like someone is giddy.
I think you described the natural high of happiness quite well
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"Natural high of happiness"? Beuatiful words, thank you!
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great
I loved this line it was incredible ~All this pleasure- it doesn't mean anything, it's just joyous, beautiful
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Thanks so much for the lovely words!
Also thanks for reading through it all- considering the content and tone I feel I should have made it shorter.
Thanks for stopping by!
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