moonlight
through bare branches
reflections of lace
In a list
A contest entry
- Fully by Mari Goes.
1300 points, ended November 22, 2008, 17 entries
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Comments
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You captured a very solid and nice imagery with your haiku. The moonlight reflecting on dry branches and giving an illusion of lace, quite a good image!
On L1, I don't think you need the word appears for it is already implied when you say reflections. Just a thought
Thanks for this lovely poem
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cornering strength
this archives shivers and warmth. the first is pleasant, not cloudy but the next expounds a season's shock still. however the last declares a sheltering of the two and even mirrors many tie ins.
that spherical glow could be looked at as some caught last leaf full of snow patterns with its silhouette strokes, which on window eye through in such wintry times was inspiration for doily curtain, a delicate view upon reduction creating...
a laugh lilts,
called Carolyn
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Funny, I used exactly the same line as you have on L2 on a haiku I posted today as assignment to advanced haiku class, and also used it as L2. We thought alike and without seeing each other's haiku
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short yet beautiful keep it up =]
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