Life is but a line
no checkpoints, no stops 'til death
but equivocal
Author notes
This started out as a minimalist poem about lines and circles and stuff, but then I realised it would be easier to make it into a haiku.
Tractern
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Comments
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deep man. *nods* real deep.
my head is bobbing and my eyes are squinting, this is a true "deep man" poem. thank you and good luck.
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Excellent!
Glad something of mine has had an impact on you.
Thanks for stopping by!
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Thank you for following my few simple contest rules! Much appreciated.
Now, I will say that while Haiku is not my favorite style of poetry (probably because I am a long winded female & cannot possibly get my thoughts out in such a constricted format), this flows well and has a nice idea.
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Glad to hear this has been enjoyed by an anti-haiku poet.
Haikus can be restricting, but that is why I like them! I am usually so verbose that haikus help me to practice succinctity.
Thanks for taking the time to comment! X
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Good One!
So this is your sixth Haiku? 
I like the way this line connects throughout & has great meaning. I suppose at 20 you haven't hit any major roadblocks to see that there can be dashes, exclamation points & many commas in life!
Just joshing you here! All the best in the Contest! 
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Thanks- I do like to exercise fluency in my haikus, though this may not be a traditional trait.
In relation to being 20, of course I haven't experienced anything particularly life-changing, but I imagine I will still be torn in between life not meaning anything, though each individual should try to be as charitable to their fellow amn as possible, which would imply life does have meaning. I dunno- maybe you're right and life does have meaning.
Anyhow, thanks for the comment!
Good luck in contest!
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That's life in a nutshell. This definitely works as a haiku. You've strayed from the traditional theme of nature with great success. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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I like this alot. It's really cool, how it's semi-math related, and semi story telling.
Nice post.
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Life is but a line
no checkpoints, no stops 'til death
but equivocal
A very cool haiku, an unending line that has multiple meanings. Thank you so much!
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An interesting point. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice commentary on life. I enjoyed it.
Mike
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Fanks kindly, bro'!
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Says a lot. Great
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Thanks kindly!
Good luck if you're in contest too!
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