Haiku: Grip Slipping
grip slipping from the
sh*tty end of the stick he
reaches out his hand ...
Author notes
Take it or leave it?
A contest entry
- 48 hours to Haiku by azure85.
900 points, ended November 21, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is this a haiku?!
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grip slipping from the
sh*tty end of the stick he
reaches out his hand ...
This is a good haiku to think about, I would never leave it. Anything that leaves the reader wondering and thinking is a good haiku. Thank you so much. -
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Thank you for taking the time to consider this and comment. But would you take his hand? I guess, ultimately, that is the question that is asked of each of us.
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grip slipping from the
sh*tty end of the stick he
reaches out his hand ...
This is a good haiku to think about, I would never leave it. Anything that leaves the reader wondering and thinking is a good haiku. Thank you so much.
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Thank you, Sandra. A bit of a bleak image, I know, but there is always the hope of redemption.
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Good write
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wow. very... different i suppose is the word. to make it a great story, you could add on to it in a different entry. you know, take the same idea and start writing. i wish you good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for taking the time to comment. In a way, I think that the story continues in the reader's own mind, if they care to imagine. I guess some of my other poems develop the themes. I will post more, in time.
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Wow- pretty dramatic for a haiku!
I hve never read one like this before- very unusual work.
Good luck in contest!
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Thanks for your comment, Tractern. This is the first haiku written by me, so perhaps that explains its unusual character.
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