Earth frozen in fear
frosted in time,
beauty buried under burdens
iced over by illusions
that chill the spirit,
dripping in desolate doses
drowning delusions.
Temporary thaws
treat the heart to hope,
only to be cooled in chaos
as the seasons of sanity
fluctuate in fate’s hands.
Grasp the generous gifts
of nature’s splendor,
paint pictures of peace and love
into your memories
to hold, heal and hide
the ugly truth hidden
in the winds of change.
Author notes
-Please credit the artist in your Author's notes: http://israelfi.deviantart.com/art/The-japanese-garden-25669116
- I wanted happy, beautiful, serene.....but, this is what I got...lol
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie weekender by thejollytinker.
750 points, ended November 17, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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So you wanted happy, beautiful, serene, well you did and you ended with the more true to life overall picture. I like this, enjoyed the read and congrats for the gold. Well done
Sheila
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thank you so much for reading 'LittleMoon' and your lovely comment. I am pleased you liked this.
blessings
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Great meaningful wordplay, even if you did unintentionally depress yourself. Oh, and thanks for commenting on mine.
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Thank you so much 'Ms.Mouse' for reading and your lovely comment. I appreciate it, and am pleased you enjoyed this.
best wishes
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Beautiful..I love the first line.
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thank you 'Reanna' for reading - I am pleased you liked this
best wishes
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Very nicely written, I always liked the winter scene, but I moved couldn't take the cold in Maine. It was a pleasure to read.
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thank you so much for reading 'Golden eyes 25' ....I am glad you enjoyed this.
best wishes
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"treat the heart to hope" - a line to remember.
Congrats on your well deserved gold trophy.
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Thank you so much 'judy.....' - glad you enjoyed this.
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Wow
I really liked how you have to take it line by line to figure out what the big picture is:] i really liked when you said "Earth frozen in fear frosted in time, beauty burried under burdens"...you are very talented...so keep going. -
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Thank you so much 'bwirth93' for reading and your lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
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Wow
this is amazing, it exsplains so well I loved this part Temporary thaws your obviously very talented keep up the good work.
treat the heart to hope,
only to be cooled in chaos
as the seasons of sanity
fluctuate in fate’s hands.
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Thank you so much 'Skittle Girl' for your lovely comment. I'm glad you liked this.
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Grasp the generous gifts
of nature’s splendor,
paint pictures of peace and love
into your memories
to hold, heal and hide
the ugly truth hidden
in the winds of change.
Wow... I love this write. It is so good, keep up the great writing hun -
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Thank you so much 'Beautiful-N-Broken' for reading and for such a lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed these thoughts.
blessings
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The word choice in this poem is nothing less than pure excellence. congrats on the gold I would call this a clear winner
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Thank you so much 'Swan song' for your lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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Wow
This is a wonderful take with the pic prompt. I could feel all the emotions and I love the way the you made it seem cold asmin brrrrrr. Well deserved Gold my friend, Michele
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Thank you so much 'mountain-woman' - glad you enjoyed this.
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well done . . congrats on the gold !!
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Thank you 'carole21' - glad you enjoyed this.
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YaY
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Thank you Starz
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Congratulations- I can applaud now! Wonderful, really.
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thank you so much 'the jollytinker' - I am so happy you enjoyed this.
And also thank you for the Gold - what a nice way to start my day!
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well expressed. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you 'penman' - glad you enjoyed.
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I love this darker take on the picture! Serene is all good.. but I'm all for a bit of dark too
Ahh those winds of change... they often give me a chill!
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Thank you kiwi - glad you liked this dark take.
When I want dark, I get humor; if I want pretty, I get dark! sheesh!
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Good writing on this aboomer! Imagery says it all with this poem. Enjoyed it a lot!
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Thank you so much 'Patpower.....' - glad you enjoyed this.
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Don't cry- you had all three! The alliteration was fantastic, never seemed forced and added such melody. Thank you!
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Bravo Boomer
Boomer, it is wonderful to see how you have grown with your writing over the past couple of years. I remember way back when... Such a gift your words, thank you for sharing them and continueing with your poetry. always apleasure to read your words
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Thank you so much 'W B Burkholder' - I am honored by your comment.
These were just some 'darkish' thoughts I had this morning - really wanted something beautiful for that picture, but.....
I sometimes think my earlier writing, that rhymed, was better....lol
Nice to 'see' you - hope things are going well.
best wishes
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WOW powerful and intense imagery very well done chilled me with shock it is a truly a talented piece of poetr
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Thank you so much 'TearfulSolace' for your wonderful comment. I am pleased you enjoyed these thoughts.
best wishes
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Spendid imagery...makes one almost shiver!!! I wrote about winter this morning. The wind here is howling and so very cold. I enjoyed your thoughts...
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thank you Az - glad you enjoyed.
We are still nice here (for November anyways!) this morning - but those 'howling winds of change' are supposed to blow through here this afternoon!
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Even though it is sad it is still a great poem I love the second stanza good luck in the contest best wishes always be well
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Thanks Starz - glad you enjoyed.
not what I wanted....lol
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