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. . .but no friendship

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"Between men and women there is no friendship possible. There is passion, enmity, worship, love, but no friendship."

Oscar Wilde

 

 

Saved;

from an untimely demise,

the kind of blissful death

you only dream about. 

 

Wasted;

Reams of days

our lovers hurt

and we stand dejected.

 

Hoped;

for something

better to evolve. . .

a new kind of high,

one without a

rotten hangover.

 

Stilled;

my heart already mends.

While I stand here reeling.

 

Done;

The dreams

of sweet surrender to a

climactic death lay embittered,

questioning the gauzy excuses

as to why I should hate you.

 

I don't, you know.

But I can't love you anymore.

It hurts too much.

 

 

Author notes

To someone I used to believe in.


Prompt:
Between men and women there is no friendship possible. There is passion, enmity, worship, love, but no friendship."
Oscar Wilde

87 words.
I decided to let this be completely and totally 100% from the heart.
I did not try and make it pretty,
or use unnecessary words when I was pouring this out.
It's almost an entire first and only draft,
and I hope you like it.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 17, 2008

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    i love how you connected with the prompt, it gave the poem something extra, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • adsaige
    November 16, 2008

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    Oh, don't I definitely know about believing in someone who's failed you, time and time and time again. I can see the pain in this write, or perhaps I'm blinded by mine right now. You know, it feels like someone's has broken inside of me and is rummaging around. My heart is...useless, used, and better discarded than still within me...If only I didn't love anymore!!!!

    Brilliant, Mama.


  • Alyzeh
    November 16, 2008

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    Lovely write, super mom. Out of all I've read today, this was most stunning without doubt! An excellent story expressed so beautifully.

    Good luck to you!
    Love ♥


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    a very ..

    powerful write! Deep story and flowing lines, makes this a favorite of mine!

  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 15, 2008
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    sorry it took so long, but here is your prompt

    "Between men and women there is no friendship possible. There is passion, enmity, worship, love, but no friendship."

    Oscar Wilde
    Irish poet, novelist, dramatist and critic, 1854-1900

    good luck

  • mcfreeman
    November 15, 2008
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    a man after midnight

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