chaste pen
soulfully poised
polishes pristine words
to shine alabaster ~ through her
darkness
Author notes
Prompt: Whiter Words. I'm not sure about the title; I thought about using the prompt, but it didn't seem quite right either.
I belive this is my first attempt at this form. I'm not sure if I got the finer points of a cinquain. Any comments on that would be welcome.
In a list
A contest entry
- whiter words by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended November 20, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
constructive criticism is desired
Comments
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One of my favourite sayings and one for which I'm quite well-known too, lol is "to write towards the light". This lovely cinquain took me there, especially the last line and the contrast between that line and the rest of the lines.
Indeed the process of making poetry here...it can be so very therapeutic. Thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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I think this is a lovely take on the prompt. A job well done on your first cinquain. You've captured the heart of a poet with these words. I recently wrote a haiku with a similar theme. Thanks for sharing.
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Oh, i love this ..."chaste pen
soulfully poised
polishes pristine words" and then the last two lines really piece everything to gether...Brilliant write!
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