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My Cruel World

Since the first day you leave me behind
i never thought that this life would be perfect
for you're the one who i love the most
and who give meaning to my life
and i know there are many girls that i can met
but i will never ever gonna find like you
the way you smile, dress, lough, speak and love me

you're one of a kind and can never be replaced

and why this world is so cruel for the two of us

forcing us to be apart

now i will never be the same again

but for all the reason why you did not fight for us

i did my best to be with you i did what i can

well i guess this is the end for the two of us

but i will always be happy for you

becouse you're happiness is my wish

and i hope you will find much better than me

 

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  • LylaEmoriaCullen
    December 2, 2008

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    Hey Ralph, this is a really good poem......You really expressed yourself really well.....If you ever need to talk I'm here for you


  • MelissaLynn
    November 18, 2008
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    who was this about


  • sense surreal gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    but i will always be happy for you
    becouse you're happiness is my wish
    and i hope you will find much better than me

    I love those last part
    you're brave enough to let go
    and wish her the best for her

    ralph, are you okay for a some editing?




  • Midnight-Tragedy
    November 16, 2008
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    Wow, this is really good!
    Love it.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    aww, wow, this is deep and emotional, great write and keep it up. take care
    Stephanie ♥


  • CrypticAngel
    November 16, 2008

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    This is just so heart-warming and sweet. I can relate to this very much back to a time when I left a guy because I wanted him to be happy. Than goodness we got back together, but this is still...indeed, very moving.


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    awwww. im so sorry sweetie... but this is such a heartwarming write. the last line is enough to make one cry...much happiness to you as well.

    becca


  • XxAbby-Jay-CrunkxX
    November 16, 2008

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    wow i can relate to this poem a lot. because sad situations like this have happened to me too. nice write,. ,really enjoyed reading it


  • LilEmoPrincess
    November 16, 2008

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    Aww hun Sad poem. "and ihope you will fidn better then me" very sad line. "Because your happines is my wish" i love that line shows how careing you are =] well done


  • silver-X-lining gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is sad, but beautiful. Some grammar issues, but your emotions are well expressed here. The ending is effective--
    "and i hope you will find much better than me" and kind of makes me want to cry for you! *hugs*

    Incredibly sad, but well penned.

    ~HH

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