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Two Souls Rooted Deep Within

To be read while this Celtic flute piece plays in the background:
Rowan's Voice performed by Random Goldfish

 

   

 

 

 

 

 

    Light miasma

    

    spiritual angels

    

    evening nestling window's edge

    

 

 

 

    precocious dances

 

 

    webbed silk tinged

    

    gathering in nascent morning breath...

    

    

    Twisted fields

    

    wild feet

    

    ghostly heavens silent, wait...

    

    

    ancient warriors

    

    pouring rains


    

    drenched footfalls slanted rays

    

  

 

    Primeval sunsets

    

    eyes consume

    

    sand-tossed beach once desolate...

    

    

    Sun to sea
 

 
    thought meandering

    

    fading moments

    

    winter winds

    

    two souls rooted deep within.

    

    

    

    

    

    two souls rooted deep within.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

Author notes



 

Poems/Scores to the Music of Random Goldfish:
(in reverse chronological order)

Thinking of August- Now or Never http://allpoetry.com/poem/5893739

Thinking of August- Duo (piano and cello) http://allpoetry.com/poem/5660705

Thinking of August- Acoustic Grand Piano http://allpoetry.com/poem/5892115

Thinking of August- Electric http://allpoetry.com/poem/5435359

Sweet August Days to Come http://allpoetry.com/poem/5423787

Sometimes... Faces http://allpoetry.com/poem/4940637

The Moon Tonight- Christmas from Ireland http://allpoetry.com/poem/4895079

Then the Merry Fiddlers Came http://allpoetry.com/poem/4885481

'Round a Grand Carousel http://allpoetry.com/poem/4778751

Two Souls Rooted Deep Within http://allpoetry.com/poem/4776245

A Dream- Where the Water Sleeps http://allpoetry.com/poem/4756347

Lune Sings http://allpoetry.com/poem/4397931

Gas Pump Music Duel http://allpoetry.com/poem/3449548

Chained in Silver http://allpoetry.com/poem/3385242

A New Autumn Day http://allpoetry.com/poem/3308104

Merry Merry Wiccan Wiccan Friends http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3293000

In this Wilderness a Love of Old http://allpoetry.com/poem/3244044

The Sable http://allpoetry.com/poem/3239364

Donkey Feathers http://allpoetry.com/poem/3238828

The Obsidian Tree http://allpoetry.com/poem/3059430

The Forest Altar http://allpoetry.com/poem/2648314

The Snowy Banks http://allpoetry.com/poem/2646132

 

(some scores modified by me)

 

 

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  • Grunts Girl silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    "Ancient warriors
    pouring rains
    drenched footfalls slanted rays
    primeval sunsets
    eyes consume
    sand-tossed beaches once desolate..."

    I adored this part -- mostly drenched footfalls slanted rays---

    i love celtic music.
    my gram when she was alive played the harp and flute and sang in a mix of her english and irish tongue...
    wish i realized what i would be missing and learned some of it from her.




    • wbiro gold member
      November 15, 2008

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      well, I'll have to change beaches to beach... thanks again... harp, flute, and singing Celtic... now there's a treat...!

      • Grunts Girl silver member
        November 15, 2008
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        brace yourself... bad joke coming:

        well i don't HARP on the little details like beach / beaches when i read... i figure you have word document to help you out with that one and how ever its posted, unless it is unreadably horrid lol..(each his own opinion on that one) i read for where it took me either in memory or self.

        i enjoy reading you.
        i have tried some links.. some work and some dont.
        but i have enjoyed.
        thanks


  • JazzALTernative silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    This works really well. The structure is found in the alternation of pure elements from line to line; while each stanza ends with a more complex thought. There is an overall sense of time going from night to day, then a sense of the moment. Perhaps the two souls are the warriors mentioned - they seem to be the focal point. It's interesting how the mind focuses on a mere mention of humanity and naturally relates the rest of the poem to their viewpoint.

    • wbiro gold member
      November 15, 2008
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      hey, thanks, I think this piece needs a little alliterative/consonance/assonance beautification, so it looks dazzling on the page... lol (after all, we are a Hallmark society)

  • Theasp
    November 15, 2008
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    and the soft breath of hatchling dragons

    I'm in Pern again

    • wbiro gold member
      November 15, 2008
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      hey, hello again... Pern? Dragons? Piqued my interest... it rings a bell... and funny how we imbue a piece with our own images... in fact, I was going to begin writing pieces with that in mind... I'll have to force myself, old habits being hard to die...


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is incredibly pretty. The words, the music, gah. It spans the seasons. Choosing my favourite line, well damn!

    I imagine the music coming though the air over the hilltops and down through the valley, late at night when all is sleeping...haha, that's a lot to be saying about my own playing! Does that count as bragging?

    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~
    MARS IDIOT, there's a little inside joke for you, haha.

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