You don't know me but
I'm the girl who accidentally
spilt hot coffee
down your flies this morning
offering to mop it up.
How can I make things right?
You were so sweet about it
despite the fact
you were being inteviewed
hope you got the job.
xxxx
A contest entry
- Passing A Note To All Poets by Dalaney.
750 points, ended November 23, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ahhh a secret love note
I like this, Hilly. I hope he got the girl, too Love, Lane
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This is so different to the other poems I have read of yours and it was sweetly surprising, easy to read, ambigious, free and witty. Well done again
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Maybe I'm wrong, but in these lines:
"I'm the girl who accidently
split hot coffee"
Shouldn't it be "accidentally" and "spilt"?
Other than that, I thought your piece was both charming, sexy and very sweet. Always a good combination. I'm impressed!
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My kind of poem I loved it Neat little touch placing kisses at the end of the note Excellent
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whoops
No job for you fella.it shoud have been a beer I think, lol
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I think his mind might have been elsewhere, as he sat in front of the panel!
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