Your picture still remains
on my bedside table.
I want to move on,
but I'm not sure I'm able.
Every night I pick your picture up
and cry until there are no more tears,
sometimes when you pass me in the hall,
I'm screaming inside, but no one hears.
You are not going to run my life anymore.
I'm attached, but have to break free.
You've controlled my life for far too long,
but my heart and brain disagree.
My heart yearns for your love,
but my brain loathes you to the core,
I'm torn in two desperate pieces
and I don't know what to do anymore.
Should I follow my heart?
Or do what will make me stronger?
Oh how I wish everything
was back to the way they were.
I need to, no have to, let you go;
I can't see any other choice,
but when I see you in the halls,
my heart will always rejoice.
Author notes
"Total Eclipse of the Heart"
He loves me not.
that's what you get when you let your heart win
--Missa
A contest entry
- Want a contest that has a prompt, want to make my day?? Enter here on the dotted line by FreeTara.
525 points, ended November 18, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "Why not tell us what you are thinking" - Winklings #146 by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended November 24, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Imagery, Emotion, Imaginatinon by Commodore Rouge.
1050 points, ended November 30, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Oh this is good. I like the ending, where it lets you know that you are not going to let him get to you in a bad way anymore, yet not be over him. That's the way I took it anyway lol. This is great. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Megan -
loved you
I like do what makes you strong lil one -
Read the rules please.
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I know exactly how you feel and you're the only one that can decide this. I felt the emotion and I can relate to this very well.
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I love this, it's creative and heart hurting
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very powerfully emotional write. Heart and mind have such a powerful control of us. The problem is they both must agree for anything to be right. Cant choose 1 and expect good things. Great flow and great choice of words
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Going along with the subject of Perdu's comment below me, I think this is a question many, many people ask themselves, including myself, although it's been a while. The way you articulate your feelings is impressive, considering you're the same age as me, and most teenagers are not eloquent in expressing their feelings towards love and what comes with relationships, crush, and so on. The emotion is pure and it feels like you poured out everything from your soul into this, like there's nothing left to hide inside. I like that feeling. I also want to thank you for not exceeding the line limit. It's annoying when that happens, so thanks for following the rules.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading, and thanks for submitting to the contest!
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You ask a very important question
a question that I have asked myself
many many times, and never found
an answer for.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck and congratulations
on your awards for this piece so far.
Zach -
heart over head always. great write I can feel the indecision.
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It is a battle...
Reason vs. emotions. You layed it out pretty good.
I enjoyed reading it. Watch your meter. There were a few bumps in the road. Ahhh...young love.
I don't miss it at all.
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AMAZINGGG! i love this poem, its very well done, i love your rhyming scheme.your emotions are portrayed beautifully, thanks for entering!!!
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sorry but it's over the line limit
i'm really sorry to have to disqualify u cos this poem is AWSOME and follows the theme perfectly but i must keep to my own rules however harsh it seems.
anyway, your poem is amazing and i love the rhyme scheme and rhythem, and the way it flows and contrasts. I just love it!
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oh i figured that out after i entered it, sorry. so i deleted it and entered one within your line limit
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WOW!
Great poem! Good luck in the contest!
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thanks!!!
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Thank you for your most heartfelt entry Josie
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lovely
i love it missa
good job
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This is yours :)
Oh gees you had me aching, i have been through an experience like this both with a guy and my father and it was like you were writing my feelings down in a way i never could! talented you are young lady!! -
sorry these are yours too
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Great poem...full of indepth feelings, i guess cause i can relate...when i was in jr. high i had a major crush on this guy, and it went on through high school and till this day I bumped into him in the store and at the mall...and ive been out of high school for 5 years and my heart still feels like its going to beat out of my chest when i see him.
but i know it would never work out... *sigh*
anywho...back to your poem...lol
great write, really brought out emotions for me and some memories
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Oh gees you had me aching, i have been through an experience like this both with a guy and my father and it was like you were writing my feelings down in a way i never could! talented you are young lady!!
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